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67764, Random 5 : Death Posted by revion, Thu Apr-26-07 03:06 AM
It keeps coming Like a wave that won’t break
And it keeps collecting
It keeps coming Without warning or preparation
And it takes without Hesitation
I’m not looking Where it strikes next
But I’m hoping That it takes me last
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67787, *shudders* Posted by mindful, Thu Apr-26-07 07:27 PM
you really put the feeling of "death" into this piece. at least for me, i could... feel the actions, the swiftness, the finality of it all. especially in the following lines:
And it takes without Hesitation
I’m not looking Where it strikes next
But I’m hoping That it takes me last
*nods*
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67810, co-sign. Posted by Nowachaoticthing, Fri Apr-27-07 01:38 PM
I don't deal with death very well, so I was uncomfortable with this poem from the get-go. I don't think my negative reaction is a bad thing... I think it's a credit to your excellent writing skills... you really moved me.
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67853, Good One ... Posted by PhotoSynthesis, Sun Apr-29-07 02:21 PM
If I had just read the poem ... *Without the Title* ... I dunnno if I'd a' known that you were talkin' 'bout DEATH -- But the more I read it -- The more clearly I see the Grim Reaper -- :P
*Felt*
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