66305, RE: i need feed back! Posted by Ezzsential, Thu Mar-29-07 11:47 PM
hmm interesting
i thought that send in the contenders had the most punches
maybe it was my deliv but i did it over (the site doesnt let u delete once u finished.. so i just redid it on pt 2)
cum original-damn dog, that shit had some killaz..
u liked get lifted? i thought that wasnt direct at all but yeah deliv was amped.. that verse is OLD as hell that is prolly why cuz i didnt read it
aiight tho.. good advice cuz fuck that im in it to win it
and i have fun doin this shit so good looks
i just hope it doesnt take me months to get a rap deliv right
but maybe i should just use the fuckin deliv style i had in get lifted
>send in the contenders didn't have any strong punches IMO > >get lifted was better, nothing real hard but the punches were >much better than that last joint. delivery was much better, >you actually sounded excited a bit > >cum original was more decent than contenders, but not phuckin >with the other joint. > >overall, your delivery is gettin better, keep workin on it. it >tooks me months to find a delivery I could deal with, and my >style is still evolvin two years later. like dude said battle >tracks shouldnt sound like your talking. you should never >sound like your talking. and your punches should be >accentuated by your delivery, I shouldn't have to listen for >punches, they should jump out at me. > >as for the writing, your punches just don't cut enough. the >rest of your writing style is pretty good, but on a >battle-track you gotta take away the person's (wo)manhood. >imagine the track were directed at a specific person, they >oughta be holdin their head in shame in when you're done. pint >blank period
shouldn't say it all or it will be taken stolen by the Devil God's my only vacation
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