send in the contenders didn't have any strong punches IMO

get lifted was better, nothing real hard but the punches were much better than that last joint. delivery was much better, you actually sounded excited a bit

cum original was more decent than contenders, but not phuckin with the other joint.

overall, your delivery is gettin better, keep workin on it. it tooks me months to find a delivery I could deal with, and my style is still evolvin two years later. like dude said battle tracks shouldnt sound like your talking. you should never sound like your talking. and your punches should be accentuated by your delivery, I shouldn't have to listen for punches, they should jump out at me.

as for the writing, your punches just don't cut enough. the rest of your writing style is pretty good, but on a battle-track you gotta take away the person's (wo)manhood. imagine the track were directed at a specific person, they oughta be holdin their head in shame in when you're done. pint blank period
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