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65674, battlin' 101? help me guys
Posted by Ezzsential, Wed Mar-21-07 05:17 PM
I was going through the archives and since I'm in a battle mood I was reading all the battles and I thought it would be nice to make a post on battling

(plus i saw posts of people asking for advice on this subject-like if they lost a battle or something)

so what are some good techniques to use?

what are similies and metaphors punchlines and wordplay?

does anyone have any insight to these things?

like a battling 101 post

where we could teach people how to become a better "battler"

=)

I have the time to invest to this right now
so i wanted to contrib

thanks

E





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65675, tell'em to check our old battle
Posted by Lincoln Hawk, Wed Mar-21-07 05:22 PM
they might learn from it
65676, yeah i feel u...
Posted by Ezzsential, Wed Mar-21-07 05:33 PM
but u got any tips?



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65678, RE: yeah i feel u...
Posted by Lincoln Hawk, Wed Mar-21-07 05:39 PM
pick at a cats weakness...personal shit...clever wordplay...cats love a good punchline that has that wow factor...im not much of a battler but i like to see that shit in battle...peace
65680, ok, can u break that down more?
Posted by Ezzsential, Wed Mar-21-07 05:45 PM
I mean, How can we find personal shit if we don't personally know the person?



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65679, changing the rhyme scheme
Posted by Ezzsential, Wed Mar-21-07 05:44 PM
This works really well for me: just some advice


When you battle I think it sounds better when you don't rhyme the last word in the rhyme with another last word-well for every sentence

You can switch it up and rhyme the last word with the first word in the next sentence
it makes it seem more creative and makes it flow better
then you change the whole rhyme scheme

Example:

Ya'll don't know I bring heat to ya kitchen
smitten I'm dissin so cold wearing mittens



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stolen by the Devil
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65681, what about "bragadocio"?
Posted by Ezzsential, Wed Mar-21-07 05:55 PM
That's what it's called when you "brag" in your rhymes
like give yourself props

Example:

I'm the illest emcee ever so come test me
I made killer cam wear pink
I am the rap fueler, the schooler and I break emcees like rulers




I think this shouldn't be used too much in battling only because I think a battle sounds better with more direct dissing.





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stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


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65689, true
Posted by Rajeniro757, Wed Mar-21-07 06:28 PM
arrogance is always good in a battle. You don't want to ever seem hurt by the challenger. This ,however, is defense it can win games when you are messing with a novice. You won't find many around here so attack go at your opponent. Slip in bragging , taunts, get your Ric Falir on ,but get right back to the punches.
65682, dissing your opponents actual rhyme scheme
Posted by Ezzsential, Wed Mar-21-07 05:57 PM
Direct hits to your opponents actual rhyme structure and dissing that are really good punches.

Especially on the internet-because people read it and begin to look for it-and if it's really true makes it worse for the opponent.

Like when you pinpoint on a word or sentence that your opponent used
and diss it




shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html
65683, personally, I think similies should be used sparingly
Posted by Ezzsential, Wed Mar-21-07 06:03 PM
just my opinion but I think that similies are kinda wack

unless you think of a really original or funny one to use

but saying "you're as old as my granma" is wack

I think that too many similies make it sound simplistic too

and if you didn't know

Definition:
A simile is a comparison between two things.

It is signaled overtly; in English, a simile is expressed by the words like or as.

I tbink that you can compare things without using like or as

and it sounds better in battling

come and test me, old grandma bessie

(yes that's wack but a quick example)

I think that reducing the use of similies looks to be more direct hitting

again, just my opinion though



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stolen by the Devil
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www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
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65684, i aint no pro-i had some questions myself
Posted by Ezzsential, Wed Mar-21-07 06:11 PM
what is wordplay?
what are punchlines?

anyone not even just battlers have any insight?




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65691, Punchline
Posted by Rajeniro757, Wed Mar-21-07 06:50 PM
Punchline- if you familiar with comedians is the last part of the joke. The part that makes you laugh, say oohh shit or damn thats cold.

In a battle it can be funny ,vicious or clever
Vicious
Canibus- I'll hit you in your chest, so hard your shoulder will touch
Clever
Elzhi- Looking for me ,under a rock bush or a tree, I'll jump on your block, and stump you til my foot is asleep

Funny
Rza- you couldn't punch your way out of a wet paper bag , with scissors in your hands



Battlers Battler!!!!!!! you can never have too many punchlines
65696, when i asked what it was I was looking for
Posted by Ezzsential, Wed Mar-21-07 07:03 PM
like a dictionary definition
but you gave examples so good enough...

lol (I knew what they were)just not how to describe

but you made it more clear for me lol

yeah I know their essential when battling lol

But I see why you were probably like "shes a battler and doesn't know what a punchline is"?

lol..



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stolen by the Devil
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www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
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65685, Be Clear
Posted by Rajeniro757, Wed Mar-21-07 06:17 PM
this does not mean you have to dumb it down, but a punchline is not a punchline if no one understands.It's your job to make the reader or listener understand , just as much as it is to take out your opponent.
The average person will not go get an ecyclopedia to find out who Copernicus is.
65686, short bars vs long bars
Posted by Ezzsential, Wed Mar-21-07 06:18 PM
Personally, i like both.

I mean to use both in a battle

like short bars

example:

I rhyme slow
Let emcees know
How I go
and throw
my foes

u know who is a great short bar battler: PG- he be wylin wit it lol

long bars are just like whole sentences used by most people

but I think it's cool to use both




shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html
65687, RE: battlin' 101? help me guys
Posted by ASIEM, Wed Mar-21-07 06:23 PM
WOW THANK YOU E
you are so talented and intelligent i gotta say all of your insight is helping me understand battle i mean i aint up on this at all the history of it the what where how of it na-thin. so i welcome this and i really hope other battlers pick up and add on cause you just allowed me to see what i always felt was a waste of time now, as another art form. there have been very few that i reply to simply cause i have had no light in this seemingly dark place
again thank you and maybe i can learn and drop one LOL naaaa.

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder
65695, ey ey not just me
Posted by Ezzsential, Wed Mar-21-07 07:00 PM
everyone has been giving their insight

but i am glad that this opened ur eyes

even u can give insight though..

like when u read a battle rhyme what stands out the most for you.. ya know?




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stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


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www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
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65698, oh yes it is an art! it requires creativity, comedy, & wit!
Posted by Ezzsential, Wed Mar-21-07 07:08 PM

shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html
65688, non-chalantness
Posted by Ezzsential, Wed Mar-21-07 06:25 PM
I think that rhymes are really good when they use that non-chalant approach.

Tonka truck-i noticed you come off like really laid back-like effortless

kinda like what makes Jay-z hot.
because Jay-z never really had any lyrical complexity bur what makes him hot is his "laid back ness"

its like he's just chillin






shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html
65692, for net-battles
Posted by Ezzsential, Wed Mar-21-07 06:52 PM
punctuation such as too many commas looks annoying to me and takes away from the rhyme

bars are ok meaning "/" but do take away

I think that just a space (return key) between bars is the best way
because we want to concentrate on content not grammar

and yeah-you gotta spell things properly
but yeah its ok to end things in A instead of R
and if you want a word to be pronounced differently so you spelled it differently to rhyme then put in parenthesis the word spelled correctly


just some advice




shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html
65693, for net-battles
Posted by Ezzsential, Wed Mar-21-07 06:52 PM
punctuation such as too many commas looks annoying to me and takes away from the rhyme

bars are ok meaning "/" but do take away

I think that just a space (return key) between bars is the best way
because we want to concentrate on content not grammar

and yeah-you gotta spell things properly
but yeah its ok to end things in A instead of R
and if you want a word to be pronounced differently so you spelled it differently to rhyme then put in parenthesis the word spelled correctly


just some advice




shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html
65694, RE: battlin' 101
Posted by C.R.I.S.I.S, Wed Mar-21-07 06:53 PM
I dont like to get into battles (especially internet battling) to much but i'll give some insight

Punclines should always be clever and original like when Wayne said
"You might wanna fall back like August
or late September Whaterva you call it
I hit niggas in the head like Vondage"

or

Joe Budden
"Son I'm that nigga
gunz blast quicker
you in the pursuit of happiness
bum ass nigga"

"Your mans aint got no time to warn you
aside from that hoody there aint no nines on you"

clever and original not repetitive like a line about myspace.

Getting personal works sometimes Like Nas vs Jay, but i depends on who your goin against cause it could turn out like Ja Rule vs Eminem.

Current Events make the best punchline cause their new and draw attention:

Examples:

Talib Kweli

I'm prayin to the lord and askin for forgiveness
Just for kicking Niggas out of the club like Micheal Richards"

Joe Budden

"them hammers unload quick
my new shit is home invasion
find your wifey like Anna Nicole smith"

Thats my little two cents, if i get to in dept i would post a whole tutorial, but their is a logic to everything.
65697, yeah definately!
Posted by Ezzsential, Wed Mar-21-07 07:05 PM
thanks

and yeah i definately agree about the current events part





shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html
65699, RE: battlin' 101
Posted by freedomfighter, Wed Mar-21-07 07:10 PM
i really don't know anything good to say but practice harder
because i never been in battle that was judge just alot of
add on dick riders listen to big pas nas redman m&m fiddy mob deep
and mix it all together and forge your own style but playing it smart with out being clever oh no-bob

sometime i don't use puch lines i flow off what they say and twist it to draw on there anger or i'll use the same words they use to see who came out with a better concept it's about mind games and don't contemplate your dilevry just let it splatter the screen like blood when chopping off a head stay in control if need be wait a day or 2 before responsing

learn your enemy and how they write how they attack it's war
and anything is fair in war mama jokes read they stuff see what there sensitive to and exploit it only a true king will over look his weakness and become stronger by flipping the game in his favor

i love to just joke around with people i'm having fun thats why i rule it's not to hurt anybody but to grow together

peace

love sweetie

come out swinging champ

but watch the hooks because one hook can kill you
no just verses you know

65701, not every punchline is made alike(don't worry)
Posted by Rajeniro757, Wed Mar-21-07 07:19 PM
just like there is a lot of creativity that goes in to the Haymaker punchlines, you can make up for it with rhyme scheme, flow, onomatapia and aliteration. this is my favorite part.

Battlin is like boxing. Those Heymakers that knock out your opponent with one mighty swing is rare. The onomatapia,aliteration, rhyme schemes, simile and metaphors are the combos. Once you get that hard hit in go to work with the combos. Style and craetivity will go far.
65744, and onomatopoeia is:
Posted by Ezzsential, Thu Mar-22-07 06:01 PM
Words that through their segments imitate sounds one can hear in the environment. e.g., whoosh, meow, clink, bong, boom, creak, cockadoodledoo, cheep, zoom, buzz, etc.

i didnt even know that...







shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html
65707, read a zin post
Posted by Zin, Wed Mar-21-07 08:27 PM
and copy what ...you see ...lol

be personal ....
be personable ....
be witty ....
be cleaver....
be clear ....
be percise...
go hard ....
and then after you do all that

drag you nuts across it ....and you got a battle verse ...real talk
65710, LMAO I knew that was coming
Posted by Rajeniro757, Wed Mar-21-07 08:47 PM
bragging and Zin is like Sun and Light
65714, RE: battlin' 101? help me guys
Posted by ASIEM, Thu Mar-22-07 02:09 AM
battle caps be beefin
trigger happy policin
starin eyes shootin
cats dreamz
placin blame er where
pullin all nighters
nuttin on finggaz
sueezin last juice
from dry nuts
dusty dey called em
got suicide bombers
screamin help me Jezuz
legends in minds
unequipped to follow
three syllables
just hollow images
don't blast da poets
cause mcees know its
just entertainment
sent for rearrangment
twisted fates
find haters pleadin dey case
before arraignment
it don't mean nuthin

lol if i could battle yall really would be in trouble this is a fun thread tho keep it movin

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder
65748, wait a minute...
Posted by Ezzsential, Thu Mar-22-07 08:47 PM
asiem,

u make no sense lol

first, you were sayin how this post opened ur eyes to battling and how it is an artform
then u come back and write a rhyme 'bout battling and how it lacks content

thats not true though

and im not just sayin that

because its mad hard to come up with witty things to say and incorp it into rhyme that does require effort

u have to be creative and original as with writing poems and u get judged on them
cuz its a battle!
so it makes u pull on ur creativity even harder from the challenge..


so dont sleep

battles get more attention and make the listener listen to ur lyrics harder in alot of instances



shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html
65746, using acronyms
Posted by Ezzsential, Thu Mar-22-07 06:26 PM
In a battle acronyms that are dissing the opponent I have used

and it helps me to think of words

but i used this one once:

"you contracted S.I.D.S.= Sntences Irrelevent Due to Structure"

oh and If ur acronyms rhyme that's straight too...



shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html
65766, Good Post Ezzy!
Posted by PhotoSynthesis, Thu Mar-22-07 11:03 PM
*Very Good* -- :D

Tho I'm "not" a battlecat, I know what I like to read innna battle, nahmean?

What turns me on is a clean~crisp~intellectual battle -- A clever battle of wits & wisdom -- with a touch of street!

Everything counts -- SPELLING -- PUNCHLINES -- METAPHORS -- SIMILES -- GRAMMAR -- CADENCE, etc.

The crispness comes in with a snappy, braggadocious personna -- laced with witty -- *OH SHIT, NO HE / SHE DIDN'T* -- humor!

To me, sloppy~ness in spelling, grammar, punchlines, rhyme~scheme, cadence, etc. warrants demerits, points taken off the entire flow.

~PLUS~

It's not necessary -- (I guess) -- but if you can flow a battle "verbally" ((OUT LOUD))) -- and it rocks with rhythm & head nods -- extra bonus points are in order in my book -- :9

The reason I say ^this^ is cuz I've seen lyrics that LOOK tight/SOUND tight *written* -- (But they're kinda long in length) -- So if you try to flow it orally, it don't fit in ya mouf right -- *U can't SPIT it without squinching the words or tryna say em' real fast* -- (Don't ask me what "squinchin'" means, just use your imagination) -- *chuckles*


And if you drag yo nasty sweaty balls/nuts or dick juice on da flow -- I AIN'T READIN' IT!!! -- *ewwwwwwww* -- :P

Besides, what if a girl is battling -- What does she drag across her flow to "supposedly" make it iLL? -- *hmmmmmmm*



65767, i guess peeps are assumin now that i am a battle-net-cee?
Posted by Ezzsential, Thu Mar-22-07 11:09 PM
dog-ill battle cats right now in audio


LOL!

but as for what u were sayin photo, i agree

good advice thanks



shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html
65776, you read em all the time and you quote the part
Posted by Zin, Fri Mar-23-07 06:28 AM
where i dragged my nuts the hardest most of the time lol!!!!

and if you a gurl you drag ya ass across it ...gives it some stank ....lol!

you know what i mean ....lol!?
65782, Shuddduppp!
Posted by PhotoSynthesis, Fri Mar-23-07 10:43 AM
You're an exception to the rule! -- :P

Besides, your experience an' reputation preceeds you -- But aairrrybody can't get away wit that shyt, nahmean?


How come balls/nuts and asses gotta put funk innnna battle flow any damn wayz?!?!?

You just nasty, thas' all -- (Head all in the gutter and shit) -- *LoL*


((( E L E V A T E .. YO .. MIND )))


Let the funk flow from the stank on yo pen ... *P-Funk* -- :9


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And keep ya balls in yo pants! -- *Phewwwwww* -- x(





65797, RE: Shuddduppp!
Posted by Ezzsential, Fri Mar-23-07 01:56 PM
ROFLMAO! zins outta hiz mind


shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html
66623, archive?
Posted by Ezzsential, Mon Apr-02-07 02:45 AM

shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html
66625, thanks guys appreciate it!
Posted by Ezzsential, Mon Apr-02-07 02:51 AM
for giving such good advice!



shouldn't say it all or it will be taken
stolen by the Devil
God's my only vacation


...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq
www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul
www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html