Cupid Spread Thin

cupid takes breaks from striking
to call me to lie
next to
and then
to him

and this is blue cool
usually with some background beat blaring
perfectly tuned out as we tune in
to each other

we know our lies
and in turn deliver our lines
with stellar conviction
“read me you so i can read you me”
our eyes say
then we pause

his bow pushed aside
we push attire to the side
and let limbs, not love, be

we fall on the 1st
on the 2nd
perhaps the 3rd if the moon was right
as each time is a cause to
praise valentine

“you always miss me
but i manage to catch some your arrows
with snake like reflex
twiddling your mark and passive aggression
playfully
i won’t let you get me
cause we won’t function got”

“we are only because our existence is an attempt at civil union
i own up to our truth
because i understand our lie
i’ll never own all your arrows
i don’t want your love”

thie ending has me wondering with so much content it seemed to end abruptly and kinna the easy way out
whaat?

"i don't want your love" ??? is that really true?


"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder

oh its most definitely some sort of cop out. i was hoping some sort of feed back would help me figure out how to finish this piece.

i don't think she wants this cupid's love but i need to flush it out

love is nothing
but evrything must be loved?

finish it wit a hit of vodka and a lemon twista
as one hearts sizzles on a cold frying pan

so far so good ill be looking for moore!!

were the most important and to me; held the poem together.

we fall on the 1st
on the 2nd
perhaps the 3rd if the moon was right
as each time is a cause to
praise valentine

the rest is sort of choppy here and there, just a bit hard (at first, for me) to understand. and yes, welcome. *nods*

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What ^she^ said!


And -- (((WELCOME))) -- :)

thanks!

totally understand.
a lot of my pieces are kinda like works in progress. i put down the first thing that comes to mind when i want to convey something and usually leave it as is.
this was what free flowing.
:) the section you took to took me more time the rest because i knew what i wanted to play around with and then had to figure out a 'pretty' way of doing so :)

thanks for the feedback... working on finishing this up...
will post up when done