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63119, finite
Posted by marijane, Sat Jan-13-07 09:45 PM
It's like rain on your wedding day...
That's what I'd say if we'd gotten that far
the ironies had babies
we sat in silence
loving the akward space
peeling at the air
aching for rememberence of bliss
moments past
the sheets were still rustled
her name fresh on his lips
his skin newley embedded in hernails
without erotica
this was the end of an era
the peace that calms the dying
blew ferry dust over their last kiss
eyes turned keys of destiny and
LOCKED
she knew
he pretended he didn't
as she didn't turn back
and he didn't wait
driving off
she smiled
I smiled
knowing i hadn't lost
wishing I had won
in secret symposiums
with sweetened symphonies
and hip-hop hearts
beating
you know who you are
my inspiration
I'll always love you.
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63177, @ least it was cathrtic for me
Posted by marijane, Wed Jan-17-07 12:31 AM
happy new year writer's block.
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63216, RE: @ least it was cathrtic for me
Posted by invisible ink, Fri Jan-19-07 10:45 AM
glad you found your voice again...always a fan...miss k
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63220, Thank you very much
Posted by marijane, Fri Jan-19-07 03:15 PM
Glad to see there were those with flashlights...shining through my darkness. Many Blessings
Keep it up
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63338, yeah...i was a little concerned
Posted by invisible ink, Wed Jan-24-07 02:18 PM
ur previous pieces were so dead on ...and then...u seemed to be hurt and confused...angry...but i was hoping it was coming to a close...
keep surfacing...miss k
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63180, RE: finite
Posted by PhotoSynthesis, Wed Jan-17-07 01:11 AM
*Bitter~Sweetness In The Mixxx*
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63204, RE: finite
Posted by ASIEM, Thu Jan-18-07 12:36 AM
sounds like you just might go back for more hhhmmm?
nice read
"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder
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63219, No that was the last time
Posted by marijane, Fri Jan-19-07 02:26 PM
scouts honar. It was good but th leaves of love are falling and my heart is wintering to that situation....not the person just the situation.
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63248, finding peace in letting go, but keeping the love = priceless
Posted by mindful, Sat Jan-20-07 01:05 PM
i really connected with the following lines:
without erotica
this was the end of an era
the peace that calms the dying
blew ferry dust over their last kiss
eyes turned keys of destiny and
LOCKED
she knew
he pretended he didn't
*nods* Peace~
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ain't free. -Mos Def
no half-steppin in '07.
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63351, It hurts to let go
Posted by Shakeet Lokh Em, Thu Jan-25-07 04:59 PM
But you write out the pain well.
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63377, thanx this is STILL one of my favorite pieces
Posted by marijane, Fri Jan-26-07 12:14 PM
I can feel it even when i forget i was the one that was there. Keep shining!
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