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62980, watch & forgive
Posted by Monk, Sat Jan-06-07 08:34 PM
watch me
watch me sit here and wait
watch me pass on my fate
watch as i build hate, distaste
my own feelings steaming and self loathing
inaction holding me back from boasting
so i sink -
a river revealing my deepest demons
seemingly seething my soul
as i struggle to stroke & stay afloat
looking for any hope or reason
but my seeing is revealing treason
commited by my own being
the feeling im feeling
a reflection of the inaction of my actions
an infatuation of passion
passing on whats really important and lastin'
so i put myself on blast
for mistakes i made in my past
Forgive me for my lies
forgive me for being an ass
forgive me
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62982, RE: watch & forgive
Posted by Focus23, Sun Jan-07-07 10:10 AM
Love the word play. There is a bit of emotion involved here as well.
Nice stuff.
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62990, RE: watch & forgive
Posted by Monk, Sun Jan-07-07 06:05 PM
word
thanks for posting i appreciate feedback on my joints
always trying to get better so everything helps especially the encouragement
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63616, up nm
Posted by mindful, Sun Feb-04-07 11:03 AM
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"He that falls in love with
himself will have no rivals." -Benjamin Franklin
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63666, I'd 4~Give U ...
Posted by PhotoSynthesis, Tue Feb-06-07 01:35 AM
Your words reek of remorse, humility, & repentance -- And that's a good thing! -- :)
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