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62281, fragments Posted by WILDOUT, Sun Dec-03-06 11:27 AM
if you wait for me then ill come for you although ive travelled far i always hold a place for you in my heart..
it was the start of my memories of my true love in the deepest of a daze i rushed into things headfirst dead thirsty starving for love afraid and unafraid of stealing your love i was a fool and a tool of my own circumstance now i see and i wait for my song to dance
theres something much deeper
and its your secret and mine
its in the design of this dimension its beyond all our eyes i see something, no sees not the right word i feel something, but i cant really quantify what ive heard with my soul and my spirit twisting above the clouds a dragon wrapped around the moon and tears fell down and the tide of the future moved according to her
i feel like ive always been yours
and in this earth there is love for one and all we are like rose petals inside the fall and our wishes are the wind taking us on our ride these are only fragments of what i feel inside
and youve fed the earth by giving me love when my body returns to the womb the life replaced in the tomb will be there because this is my existance and we're only hear like this now i wouldnt have this body stand by anyone else
my love
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62282, My goodness...I love this peice Posted by PepperRutledge, Sun Dec-03-06 11:43 AM
My fav part
>i feel like ive always been yours > >and in this earth there is love for one and all >we are like rose petals inside the fall >and our wishes are the wind taking us on our ride >these are only fragments of what i feel inside > >and youve fed the earth >by giving me love >when my body returns to the womb >the life replaced in the tomb will be there because >this is my existance and we're only hear like this now >i wouldnt have this body stand by anyone else > >my love
Love is such a powerful feeling and I love seeing the different ways people express it. I felt this one.
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62432, RE: fragments Posted by j alise, Fri Dec-08-06 10:26 PM
such a beautiful way to describe union. most people can't articulate a bond that is felt. our energy is shared, floats in the universe.. you painted a picture for me, thank you.
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62458, ethereal and airy Posted by ms mimi diva, Sat Dec-09-06 12:40 PM
Lovely work.
I sense a lot of passion here. Whimsical, but grounded by something,--very appropriate. I'd encourage you to play with the form. If a fragment were written, what would it look like on the page? I take that inspriation from your lines below-- I can just see this "song dancing".
where it hit me me: was a fool and a tool of my own circumstance now i see and i wait for my song to dance
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