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61426, the process of writing
Posted by Monk, Tue Oct-24-06 03:54 PM
semi finished piece lookin for some feedback, holla
its the emotional outburst
feelings flying throughout words
colliding physics in Not worlds
the fitting derision
of fighting from prison
equal to the time it takes to
formulate thoughts to arrive on page
postulate ideal spots night time and day
its my heaven and hell
where my Id dwells
my ego swells to spit lyrical spells
capture imaginations of my own growin impatient
so flows grow and i take it for what its worth
another conception destin for the herse
its the division of thoughts risen
formed in disease and depression
to raise up disires
and pick thru dissection
the good and the bad
the blood from the scabs
then write it all down
pen it to the lab
put it out as everything i have
and i want not, never
thats an idilic endeavor
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61477, it picked up here for me
Posted by mindful, Thu Oct-26-06 06:12 PM
at these lines:
the fitting derision
of fighting from prison
equal to the time it takes to
formulate thoughts to arrive on page
postulate ideal spots night time and day
its my heaven and hell
where my Id dwells
my ego swells to spit lyrical spells
and kind of fell off from the flow afterwards... Peace~
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