61216, RE: (old school criticism) I think the first five lines are unnecessary Posted by soulchild, Mon Oct-16-06 12:07 AM
the first line "one mississippi two mississippi" is acting as the title right now. So, sorry for the confusion. But you're saying, lose the first four lines?
and I'm in no way offended. I haven't looked at this piece in a while because there was some controversy surrounding it, and it's good to get solid advice.
soul.
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