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Posted by marijane, Thu Oct-12-06 12:01 PM
Plungin into a vat of deep
I see a figure placid like a figurine
a complete stranger grabs my peacefully flaling limbs
as a vacumn I rush toward the break
I WAS drowning
now I'm saved
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Posted by KnowOne, Fri Oct-13-06 10:44 AM
hmmm interesting drop..... may I ask what inspired this piece?
Keep Flowin' Sis.....
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61154, Hey you....
Posted by marijane, Fri Oct-13-06 11:16 AM
I don't know I've been somewhat pensive lately. On some fanatical fictional tip and that's what flowed from my extremities. In short....I don;t know. Could be Satyrical. Could be not. Keep shining though.
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61244, do me a favor: expound on this
Posted by blaksilence, Mon Oct-16-06 01:40 PM
> On some
>fanatical fictional tip and that's what flowed from my
>extremities. In short....I don;t know.
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Posted by soulchild, Sun Oct-15-06 02:41 AM
just in my opinion...rather than tell me this:
"I WAS drowning
now I'm saved"
I think I'd like to gather this from the imagery of the piece.
that's just me.
keep on.
soul.
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61241, figurative
Posted by marijane, Mon Oct-16-06 11:27 AM
not literal...but thanx. Keep shining!
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61196, one word titles
Posted by mindful, Sun Oct-15-06 11:27 AM
that fit so very well with the written work... this is one of them...
a complete stranger grabs my peacefully flaling limbs
as a vacumn I rush toward the break
I WAS drowning
now I'm saved
*nods* Peace~
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61253, Hi
Posted by ToeJam, Mon Oct-16-06 05:15 PM
I just gave you a myspace request from my group the Philosophy.
This piece WAS interesting. The wording was a little awkward but the imagry was strong, nonetheless. Glad you made it out.
Peace.
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