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59505, good fairies Posted by ms mimi diva, Fri Aug-18-06 03:00 PM
Who killed little Miss America? the flaxen haired tawny curled beauty that so many secretly adored? Was it an adulterous slight of hand cutting through the night or was it the sight of her an angel freeze
framed
in her family photo?
innocence and knowledge dancing on her forehead like sizzling beads of sweat?
who will dance for us now who will be the coveted dream that no one has but we all long for like the ache to the tooth before the good fairies come?
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59512, yeh Akeela said it best... Posted by ASIEM, Fri Aug-18-06 10:37 PM
"prestidigitation" and "Barby" was no more as she was before
"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..." ASIEM "Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran (Be and it is) " A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder
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62205, I Dunno About The Subject Title ... Posted by PhotoSynthesis, Thu Nov-30-06 12:07 AM
But I like the concept and flow of this -- Yuuuup*
S'specially right here:
>innocence and knowledge >dancing on her forehead >like sizzling beads of sweat?
>who will dance for us now >who will be the coveted dream >that no one has >but we all long for >like the ache to the tooth >before the good fairies come?
I mean -- I see where the fairies title comes from -- But I don't tie it in to the flow until the very end, nahmean?
Don't pay me no mind tho -- I need to take my butt to sleep! -- ;)
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62218, RE: I Dunno About The Subject Title ... Posted by ms mimi diva, Thu Nov-30-06 12:49 PM
Thanks, Photo. I see what you mean. I'm not wedded to the title, either. It says something, but not really enough. I was considering something along the lines of "little mrs. america and the great toothache", but decided it would be cliche. This should read like a dark fairy tale. That's really what the Ramsey case is all about.
I'll put some more thought into it. Maybe another name will come up.
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62219, :::DARK FAIRIES' TALE::: Posted by PhotoSynthesis, Thu Nov-30-06 12:55 PM
^That^ would've done it for me! -- *I Think*
Or something with a light but sinister~twisted~ironic take on it, nahmean?
But like I said -- I see where it tied in at the end -- I just found myself looking for the good fairies and there weren't any! -- :(
Nice work nevertheless ...
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