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Topic subjectMoment of Clarity
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59496, Moment of Clarity
Posted by ak_reborn, Fri Aug-18-06 12:13 PM
(Inspired by Jay Z'z remix of moment of clairty)


Yo,I clear my mind,
my throat,
and focus on reality,
my moments of clarity,
increasing so rapidly,
my prime time,
and sparkle like the diamond,
i was raised to be,
graphically,,
Im Ali mixed with me mentally,
but mentally,
im London in harmony,
my karma be,
entwined with harmony,
and quietly,
expand in theology,
academically,
ima school drop out,
eventually,
my mindful doubts,
will let go of me,
re-discover my ability,
to make hits,
irresistibly,
and enemies,
can get to steppin,
im reppin sucess,
excelling those of excellence,
im eminent,
its scary,
my pulmonary,
actions have led to excess,
to show my affection to relievin my stress,
yes.


59544, RE: Moment of Clarity
Posted by ASIEM, Sun Aug-20-06 03:00 PM
this flowed so well however i would remove the "but" grammatically it robs your rhythm

"keep pennin till the earth birth's your rightful seed then nurture it wit more ink..."
ASIEM
"Kuun fiyah Kuun" Quran
(Be and it is)
" A writer takes his pen to write the words again that all in love is fair" Stevie Wonder
59545, RE: Moment of Clarity
Posted by ak_reborn, Sun Aug-20-06 03:17 PM

Thanks for da tip Asiem,peace.