this piece lost me in the begining...

"when the truck pass bye
catholics christians and jews starts to cry
tail pipes leaking a best tis
what's this modern day hitler
twisting you like twistlers
for years of calling me a nigger"

what did you mean by these lines?

...what i got from them was a lot of anger..
like when you said.. no religion, no politics, no family,
it didnt seem like you wanted things that way..
because the rest of the piece was very charged...
i liked the line about paul... i think its a turning point in the piece... it was a clever way to say you didnt want to be a martyr..
or...you didnt quite believe in the bible... or you dont quite trust the establisment.. after that line.. you start to open up about what i think made you angry... lost job, lost hope, lost sanity... i think when you look at the piece as a whole.. its an attempt to weave all this together.. to make the connection between poverty and economic oppression, with the social isolation that comes along with living outside of westernized institutions... all of them.. even the ones percieved as inherent and given.. like family...

overall though.. i think you end this piece prematurely..
you dont talk about why you hate... or why others hated you
you dont talk about why you dont have a religion/politic/family
etc. i could go on but i think you feel me...

if you could express why these things have happened
or why you feel this way
you wouldnt need to use the word bitch in the title..
you would be able to give a clear direction
to what was on your mind

much love

peace