67932, this... Posted by Foneticcus, Wed May-02-07 11:10 AM
>chained to him for >6 years and counting, she has >lost her smell.
was where the poem started.
those words made me stop.
arresting.
perhaps find a way to set it up in less words, & drag the reader into the still-beating heart as quick as you can? 'cuz that word: "smell"...just so unexpected & poignant.
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