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58507, I looked up Posted by rubbersoulonice, Sun Jul-16-06 02:28 PM I pour up Broadway in the early afternoon Trying to get home home or not home and I see you Lean out your window 12 floors above me Like a gargoyle smoking a cigarette and I think At that height anyone can be a lover Or a stone woman and I think Angels grow in your hair Voice sounds like cheap champagne Bubbling into me You, the architect Making this building live against the too-blue too-clean Sunday morning sky I trail on by Suspended above the scene you are pulling us all up there The building, the street, the metro It is the third day She is risen She exhales perfect rings ------------------------------ Something like Eldridge Cleaver meets John Lennon
58511, Mother Naked Posted by rubbersoulonice, Sun Jul-16-06 02:47 PM Mother naked I lay With the breeze passing over me The ceiling the white of forgotten messages Tunes drifting though the room could have been written for this moment Mother naked I know She's determined now Mercy will not pass the barrier of her teeth and Mother naked it's reeling and Mother naked I move to the window and look at the Bronx Veiled kingdom It's no longer her mercy that I need Just to know Grace hasn't died in her Mother naked I smile And look for messages on the ceiling ------------------------------ Something like Eldridge Cleaver meets John Lennon
58536, RE: I looked up Posted by seraph219, Mon Jul-17-06 11:37 AM Glad to see your words again. How's the city treating you?
58548, RE: I looked up Posted by rubbersoulonice, Mon Jul-17-06 03:48 PM It's been ok. I'm in a language institute right now so I'm not getting a lot of time to do anything other than study, but hopefully that'll ease off in a month. ------------------------------ Something like Eldridge Cleaver meets John Lennon
58689, LOL...he keeps you comin' back too huh? Posted by Foneticcus, Sun Jul-23-06 01:02 PM smiles startlingly vivid.
58699, sometimes, in all heterosexual-ness, i'm Posted by blaksilence, Sun Jul-23-06 07:52 PM glad to see your name. no pause. --------- tah-haa-haa.... - k
58702, aiight Posted by blaksilence, Sun Jul-23-06 08:20 PM pause. ------ tah-haa-haa.... - k
59148, dude, you act like all this homosocial love... Posted by Foneticcus, Fri Aug-04-06 04:35 PM you're showing ISN'T mutual?! are you nuts? LOL... i cracked up just readin' yr message anyways... & i'm saying tho -- don't you feel me on rubbersoul? gosh, some of us might need to throw ourselves back in the mix here... the creative juices are runnin' too dry, & we need a funky fresh, well-timed kick in the seat of the pants. re-reads (um...now if all that ain't pause-heavy, i dunno what is!)
58574, This looks easy Posted by empro, Tue Jul-18-06 05:51 AM the way it flows seems almost effortless. Maybe the same of how i look at making up rhymes. But poetry is hard as hell for me. This was very clear, crisp, and detailed. Thanks for posting
58619, RE: I looked up Posted by Frank Parlous, Thu Jul-20-06 01:28 AM i agree.. this was form to the point of formlessness i love the gargoyle smoking cigarettes.. ... beautiful painting my friend
58697, this Posted by blaksilence, Sun Jul-23-06 07:45 PM and mother nature makes me want to write something. 'preciate that. -------- tah-haa-haa.... - k
58771, classic Posted by Ezzsential, Tue Jul-25-06 06:33 PM as always ur shit conveys a new perspective, literally! luv it - I write battle verses to Mariah Carey songs...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoulmusiq www.myspace.com/ezzsentialsoul www.webspawner.com/users/delicateaurasoul4/index.html
58819, RE: I looked up Posted by UncleClimax, Wed Jul-26-06 01:46 PM >I pour up Broadway in the early afternoon >Trying to get home home or not home and I see you >Lean out your window 12 floors above me >Like a gargoyle smoking a cigarette and I think >At that height anyone can be a lover >Or a stone woman and I think >Angels grow in your hair >Voice sounds like cheap champagne >Bubbling into me >You, the architect >Making this building live against the too-blue too-clean >Sunday morning sky >I trail on by >Suspended above the scene you are pulling us all up there >The building, the street, the metro >It is the third day >She is risen >She exhales perfect rings > jaw drops gorgeous. u make me envy u the best compliment i can give. >Something like Eldridge >Cleaver meets John Lennon
58826, RE: I looked up Posted by the_best_part, Wed Jul-26-06 02:11 PM inspiring. beautiful too.
58836, your username has always been intriguing to me Posted by mindful, Wed Jul-26-06 05:44 PM your words, just the same: Like a gargoyle smoking a cigarette and I think At that height anyone can be a lover Or a stone woman and I think Angels grow in your hair Voice sounds like cheap champagne Bubbling into me You, the architect Making this building live against the too-blue too-clean Sunday morning sky love the lines above... it'd be an understatement to tell you, you paint a great picture... Peace~ ----------------------- Pinwheels and Hula Hoops: my book http://www.lulu.com/content/132318 http://msmind.blogspot.com no shit in 06. you should know that when you smile sincerely it has a beautiful effect �sunshine
58846, inspiring. Posted by STIMULI, Thu Jul-27-06 12:25 AM both very beautiful.
58903, RE: I looked up Posted by Nowachaoticthing, Fri Jul-28-06 03:13 PM I agree with all the positive vibes posted here. It didn't feel like i was reading... it was as if I were swept away. Lovely poem. "To be a poet is a condition, not a profession." - Robert Frost My crappy blog: http://www.livejournal.com/users/eyes_of_mine/ Blind Eye Turning: My book http://www.lulu.com/content/187759 My other crappy blog: http://inevitabletruth.blogspot.com/