I may not be a professional, i may not have the best equipment, but im that dedicated to try n help you.I feel after the criticisms you was hit with last time which were hartsh but true, i feel youve come back with somewhat a much improved performance overall, however that does not mean it was great, i still feel you could have pushed you barriers, i dont know if its just me, but it sounds like you can give you voice a bit more conviction, Not sure if that style was intended, because its hard to judge on someone you dont know or havent heard live, but id say it was improvement to what i heard previously, a major improvement.

Also, remember to keep rhyming to yourself, i do it all day long, not as much since i lost my pc (Wheres a repair man when ya need him?) It really does improve one overall.