Hey,
thanks y'all for the feedback.

Spittin my verses/Intensity:
I think part of my problem is that I am being impatient about this. As in, I'll come home, and before eating, I'm already tryna do some recording -- so the hunger definitely affects my projection and the intensity I spit into the mic.

Plus, I don't like doing punch-ins.

(@PhotoSynthesis) I think I under-estimated how sensitive people are to the intensity of a performance. So...I have stopped doing the rap-while-hungry thing since it's counterproductive LOL.

My transition:
Yea, that's something I am having a problem with; i.e. being able to transition while still making sure that the listener is following what I am saying. I am able to control it better when I flow slower at a Kanye-type pace. (@see the Against The Grain {Barry Bonds} on myspace page).

I will wait till I get a better mic before I start recording again.

Thanks much, really helped.