thank you... i kinda updated that part. do you think it loses its quality with my changing it to...

UPDATE:
one of our many songs is playing our background
you say to listen so i can hear how it reminds you of me
your mouth keeps moving
singing something pretty that just i don’t need to hear
so i look on as your lips dance

>but your mouth is moving
>saying something pretty that just i don’t need to hear
>so i look on as your lips dance
>
>Liked that part, overall the imagery in this piece real nice,
>made you really feel the thoughts.