>Inconsistent and odd framing. I'm guessing this was
>deliberate, but when you break the rules like that, unless you
>do it masterfully, it comes across as amateurish. For
>instance, why is the funeral director's head cut off?

It is deliberate odd framing basically because my shot list went out the window when someone at the school broke the wheels for the jib making it damn near impossible for two people to handle.

And, granted the framing seems odd, but I think the way I balanced the objects within the frame point to it being intentional.

>Eyelines don't match.

>Lighting issues. I'm sure the red on Asper's ear was thought
>to be a subtle touch on set, but it looks kind of silly. Other
>colored lighting elements are distracting. With a set this
>minimal, why not black and white?

Black and white is expensive to buy and process and would have depleted my film allotment. Besides, the absence of color would have given the audience even less to look at.

>Casting could have been better, but I'm sure you went with the
>best options at your disposal.

This is the only thing I believe is done spot on. A lot of people have complained about the theatrical acting but it was our intention from the beginning.

>The shots never cut together to give us a coherent idea of the
>space the characters are in. I'm guessing this is to hide the
>incomplete set, but each shot looks entirely isolated from the
>others. No "film space" is created."

This is another common complaint and one I agree with. I had planned a lot more coverage, but, again, that went out the window with my shot list and dwindling time.

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>It's cute but slight. Do you really want to make Addams Family
>episodes?

Like I said, it's a first draft that's why I'm looking for comments. I'm not going to be a dick and attack the final sentence.

Mech