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18160, Topic Tourney: Championship
Posted by Jon, Wed Jan-18-06 07:36 PM
first of all, blaksilence: GEEZE!!! you didn't have to go and vote against yourself!

second of all, sorry it took me til the end of Wed to get this up, UMass Lowell is trying to throw me off my future and present.

third, congrats to muddywatters, you deserve it. i had a great concept, took a huge risk, but was unable to pull it off and you pulled yours off great.

daniemuse, you DEF belong here.

ok....so here it is

daniemuse vs muddywatters

TOPIC: a dedication verse to one (or more) of your fav artists
2 WORDS: .eucalyptus. | .dragon. (use both)
18161, RULES: check the archives...yall know the rules
Posted by Jon, Wed Jan-18-06 07:37 PM
18162, OFFICIAL LIST OF TOPICS (filed under contributor)
Posted by Jon, Wed Jan-18-06 07:38 PM
just for everyone's own reference

1.a love-story(how many mcs can do this w/o being corny)
2.alien abduction
3.a story from the perspective of a cartoon(or tv show) character
4.how u spend your time
5.how u started rappin
6.your definition of an mc or who you think are great mcs
7.bush or politics in general

-how bout plastic surgery (ie botox, fake tits *can i say tits...oops i said it again*...LOL)
-which brings me to another topic: censorship...

a)animal instincts
b)the boondocks
d)the almight dollar
l)the lox
o)outer space
q)quid pro quo
r)running for president
y)your job
z)ummm, how 'bout the zoo

nichtophobia (fear of the dark)
ice cream
your first love
the Simpsons
if you had x-ray vision
being a turntable
your biggest regret
being a teardrop

-Sittin, maybe anxious, waitin for somethin to happen during which you can make a HUGE decision---(Yeah that's a lil specific, but we're lookin at how the conveyence of the two verses compare, so...)
-Makin the whole underlyin meaning/plot of a given movie into a verse-
-Bein Unconscious- -Right before, during, and right after sleep-

-Suggestions: add a few "must use" words or subtopics to each topic that have to be incorporated into the rhyme. Like if the topic was "war", for instance, the words you would have to use are Fallujah, Nazis, preemptive, and genocide
Jon speaking: I'm going to use this suggestion, but for extra fun, it will be a word that is NOT an obvious fit to the topic.

-a tree
-a bird
-a river
-forbidden love
-picking a song and writing a verse to it. or writing a dedication verse to your fav artists.
-roll playing? write from the perspective of a person, a place or thing.

-bruised and fat eyes
-black tribes
-crack ties
-building blocks
-squeeling glocks
-precision persistence
-the decisions of infants
-love lost
-lust found
-grub costs
-and bust downs
-and nice smiles
-chill times with ill dimes
-blood and ink
-drugs and drink
-skills shine

-Boob Jobs
-Care Bears
-World Hunger

-Knowledge of Self
-Tormenting Thoughts
-Growing Up

-Nature (you said not to take any of yours but i have to at least include this one)

-being in the shoes of someone in a tragedy

18163, Can this get an anchor?
Posted by daniemuse, Thu Jan-19-06 12:02 PM
I almost didn't find it.
18164, Awwww Shit!!
Posted by empro, Thu Jan-19-06 12:10 PM
Good luck to the both of you

Both of you cats are dope as hell

18165, RE: Topic Tourney: Championship
Posted by the_best_part, Fri Jan-20-06 09:35 AM
18166, anchor?
Posted by Jon, Sun Jan-22-06 04:07 PM
18167, up...we need anchor
Posted by Jon, Mon Jan-23-06 03:23 PM
18168, due date
Posted by muddywaters, Tue Jan-24-06 02:21 AM
18169, sorry i wasn't clear. its always been a week after i post the round, but
Posted by Jon, Tue Jan-24-06 03:01 PM
since you and daniemuse have niether sent me anything, i'll make the new deadline Sunday...

...but if i get both before that, i'll post
18170, werd anchor this mods
Posted by Ezzsential, Tue Jan-24-06 02:31 AM

- I write battle verses to Mariah Carey songs...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul
when my soul speaks:
when watchin VH1 soul and they play back to back videos that i like, when I'm intertwined with i
18171, RE: werd anchor this mods
Posted by delrica, Wed Jan-25-06 04:07 PM
been waiting on jon to give me the word.

already on the job, hon.

jon, hit me backchannel when you're ready.
18172, .
Posted by Jon, Thu Feb-02-06 06:50 PM
18173, .
Posted by Jon, Thu Feb-02-06 06:53 PM
18174, .
Posted by Jon, Thu Feb-02-06 06:54 PM
18175, .
Posted by Jon, Thu Feb-02-06 06:54 PM
18176, .
Posted by Jon, Thu Feb-02-06 06:54 PM
18177, .
Posted by Jon, Thu Feb-02-06 06:54 PM
18178, * * * @ * * * daniemuse vs muddywaters * * * @ * * *
Posted by Jon, Thu Feb-02-06 07:03 PM

read both, vote for your favorite
muddywaters will be deducted 4 votes for being 4 days late.

TOPIC: a dedication verse to one (or more) of your fav artists
WORDS: .eucalyptus. | .dragon. (must use both)



In this tree of creation
The Roots are my brothers
Grounding me
Stabilizing my consciousness
Their ears are close to the earth
Listening to the voices of our ancestors and founders of this culture
Deciphering codes of truth in fresh waters
Then passing it along to the branches
To sustain artists thirsty for substance
To feed us inspiration
I am a branch
Reaching up because they push me to expansion
To lift my mind past limits of fear
To explore the musical heavens
To not be restricted
My sister is a Scott like me
First name Jill
She is a branch that is as long as her journey
She’s sturdy
The kind of branch that can support the weight
Of curious children that manage to climb up to her level of wisdom
Leaves of eucalyptus adorn us
Dripping with melodic and lyrical medicine
That is strong enough to soothe souls,
Point hearts towards hope,
And be the salve used to heal burns
Inflicted by the dragon of oppression’s fire
This tree stands strong and is eternal
Though its Thoughts are Black,
Light is emitted
This tree is proud
This tree is prolific
This tree is the life of creation



the mission
step in with all votes deleted
walk away undefeated as if somehow i cheated
my moms…
who skills wasn't vincent van gogh
stopped drawing attention, menstrual flow slowed
for three tri-mesters, life would truly test her
she swore that she would pass and i would be her last
the oldest, first one to be molded
made mistakes with this sculpture, she couldn't control it
it's complicated tryin to make that perfect vase
knowing that if you damage, it can never be replaced
constant feel of her embrace as she vowed to construct
a living statue of her blood that would have better luck
an artist...
painted "niggers" as the smartest
to make life worth it
she painted picture perfects
kinda knew we was poor but she always assured
use the tools that you have, you will always endure
she painted that wealth, never wanted for needs
if a friend asked for help, they never had to plead
painted my self esteem
"try and you'll succeed"
"jealously makes 'em mean"
"better make 'em bleed"
painted a different breed
eucalyptus...among the evergreens
fresh like baby dragonflys learning to flap their wings
thats somewhat extreme
now i'm fuckin witcha
but you get the picture

18179, Daniemuse
Posted by Shakeet Lokh Em, Thu Feb-02-06 07:25 PM
18180, standing O....
Posted by hdub, Thu Feb-02-06 11:34 PM
...a great finish to this thing

both of you really killed it to end this thing on a real nice grand finale note

funny thing- both of your lines with eucalyptus was favorites of mine out of these two

congrats to whoever wins and thanks to jon for getting this started and giving me entertaining reads--- i wasnt voting but i was checking for this often

jon--- make this a tradition man-- <<<thats my vote right there for this to happen as much as possible
18181, muddywaters
Posted by knowledge3754, Sat Feb-04-06 11:36 AM
both were good, the roots is one of my favorite groups/artists too, and i like muddy's mom a lot(jokes). but i couldnt feel/catch daie's rhythm, plus muddy played with words more, and i love that shit.
18182, RE: * * * @ * * * daniemuse vs muddywaters * * * @ * * *
Posted by ToeJam, Sun Feb-05-06 01:18 PM
Hard to say...

I've read both, I'm leaning toward one, but I'll come back in a bit and read thru again b4 I decide.

Great job!
18183, hmmm
Posted by Ezzsential, Mon Feb-06-06 06:57 AM
both pieces were great

but for this one i'm goin with muddy cuz i feel that his was casual and original and i enjoyed the humor

- I write battle verses to Mariah Carey songs...www.soundclick.com/ezzsentialsoul

i love VH1 Soul & Adult Swim!
18184, RE: * * * @ * * * daniemuse vs muddywaters * * * @ * * *
Posted by Auriz Deep, Mon Feb-06-06 07:18 PM
18185, My Vote: muddywaters
Posted by ozram, Thu Feb-16-06 06:58 PM
"for three tri-mesters, life would truly test her
she swore that she would pass and i would be her last
18186, been MIA...sorry e'eybody...
Posted by willi_dudat, Mon Feb-13-06 11:29 AM
congrats first and foremost...you two are superb writers...


"only one can win" (c) two can win-j dilla (RIP)

and my vote goes to the cat named after that redman classic...muddy-wawtahs...

imagery was ridiculous on both counts, but i could almost physically see everything muddy said...

helluva job jon and i second (or third or fourth) the continuation idea... lets see this come around again... quarterly or so???? hmmm???
18187, RE: Topic Tourney: Championship
Posted by delrica, Thu Feb-23-06 08:35 PM
Is this finished?
18188, maybe...i was hoping for more voting, but...let's let it go to Sunday
Posted by Jon, Fri Feb-24-06 09:17 AM