interesting battle fellas... here's what i think:

willi< you had some killa lines but it was kinda boring like u really didnt put any time in writing your verse
some punches were very ill but were taken by the lack of "rhyming creativity" like the simple words used to rhyme? feel me?
I also dont think that audios should be included in posts unless everyone submits them

whateva< i've seen u come much harder man! your verse was like a warm up or something BUT u keep me interested because you rhyme unevenly? meaning you rhyme the last word with the first or sometimes the last with the last, etc. nevertheless, the flow is interesting and it makes the reader want to keep reading to see what ur going to come up with next...despite the lack of punches you made it work

but in both verses i felt there should have been more effort

like i wanna feel like this is a competition

no dissing intended just honest critique

but since i have to choose i lean more towards: WHATEVA

- I write battle verses to Mariah Carey songs...
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