Doni D Boy

I liked this a lot, i saw pieces of my past relationships in it.

he says “be myself”
yet heels turn him on…dresses and such
but i like “being” funky rock star
running ‘round like i do

this reminded me of an old rock chick girlfriend i used to have and made me feel bad about the way i acted around her i was very emmm... imature. yea dats it and that covers a lot but this made me look at myself and question myself and helped me come to terms with who i am and who i am not, who i want to be, and who i dont. thanks 4 dat.

also i love the way you structure it, allowing us to really read into things in the way you intended.

i close my eyes and listen
to the music while he drives me home
but he has much to say…
about

the double meaning in the listen is kick ass here and you do it with:
lets talk…but i never hear a sound
come
outta my mouth

this is very cool and can only hope that one day i can use structure with such skill and grace. thanks again 4 your contribution.