i thought both were pretty good....i like how the first poet personified death

"His brush will penetrate you,
A knife straight through your heart,
it's poison will plague your footsteps,
A seductive work of art."

uh! i can actually feel this!

"Her acid tears will burn you,
Her knives will slash your skin,
Her crimson blood will stain you,
Empowering you to grant others eternal sin"

deadly! (no pun intended)

the second poet's imagery with lines like the following were ill:
"when friendship morphed
and flesh meshed into one mold"

"..travel back thru my history
of mystic fruit hanging from shea trees
this is a strange sort of humility"

this is just too sick!

"...visions of african lilacs
swaying and bending in elysian breezes
can somehow overwhelm
the potion of death
you gave me"

WOW

in conclusion, i'm a huge fan of personification, but when metaphoric images grip me, they often take me further out

VOTE: Poet 2


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