wow!
so unexpected but i have to give this to lif (for this verse)
even though his punchlines weren't that original & I'm not really feeling his verse ... he was punchlining throughout his whole peice (and that's what i look for in battles)
(sigh)
well Dub ya kno i always got ya back but ur shit wasnt packin enough fire!
it was just on some braggadocio shit
(shrug) I'm just sayin' I've seen u come better man!

and Lif.. eliminate the explanation points PLEASE!
I think that too much punctuation is annoying and takes away from the flow of the battle (shrug)

oh and also i think that ya'll shouldnt be so "even barred"
and u all should try rhyming the last word in the bar wit the first in the next bar so it isnt so redundant/repetative and monotonous =/

Basically... both could have come better.. but since i have to vote I give it to Lif for this one
(sigh)
come DUB! just think of one ill ass punchline then work around it in a verse...
i know how it feels to run out of shit to say...
but u can always say the same shit differently (smile)

-lol I write battle verses to Mariah Carey songs...

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