well Hdub... i truly enjoyed your peice..

you ripped it! with word play and rhythm... encore
i would love to battle u sometime for practice

ric.. youre good too.. but too many commas and excessive jargon makes it hard to follow..
(still the same critisizm i;ve given before)
but u do make me laugh tho..


-lol I write battle verses to Mariah Carey songs...

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