because i haven't had the time to dig into verses and vote appropriately.
but i don't have to go to school or work tonight...
i'm just relaxing here watching the Finals so...


First off..

Overall Vote:

Whateva- 7.8
Instant Axis- 7.9

Reasons:

Whateva:

the beginning of a verse is so important.
it's where you literally pull your dick/pussy out and put it on your opponent's forehead.

Your beginning:

>Knowone locked salt in a cage wit a slug
>A spliff, and a fifth of henny in a cage wit a thug.
>A thug killing henny wavin fifths pumpin slugs
>into Instant Axis and out of his anal plug


well done. the last 2 lines could have been stronger.
but the first 2 lines made me pay attention.

Where you won:

better consistency, format, flow, some of your punches were heavier
(deepthroat,physicists,periods, bubblewrap,director slash bad cop)

Where you lost:

weaker punches, less swagger, you let off the gas pedal in the middle of your verse:

>a black tee and timb boots, respected without suits
>in major urban disputes we commense with arms abuse
>In the city of the Roots ya best friend is a truce

in my humble opinion (humble for real fam) these were weaker lines that came across as filler.
it felt like you relaxed here instead of tearing his head off.
this is round 2 of a tournament...every word counts.



Instant Axis:

beginning:

>AX ABOUT ME...BRIZZLE AX ABOUT ME!!!!
>
>its like old leather belts sever ya flesh and burn...i be like
>whateva whateva with cats that think they clever...with that
>in turn i stash the urn...let ya ashes burn...say la v extract
>the germ...i perm cats on ocassion...straightin ya thoughts
>out...pull bait thru ya jaws mouth and blatantly call
>out..."hook line and sinker!!!"...


Outstanding. heavy, heavy confidence...heavy, heavy swagger.
imo, that last line alone was worth about 3 of whateva's punches.
i literally laughed out loud.
And that's what a battle is about...the 'Oh-Shits!'.


where you won:

basically what i said above...plus heavier punches..and tripled rhyme schemes

where you lost:

you let off the gas in the middle of your verse as well.

and

format, format, format. i'm sayin, your style is your style.
but in typing the way that you do...all of this was probably lost on half the board:


>...lies show thru reels...you pleather wiz...i rip
>thru shredder quick and lines is better writ...ya spine is
>jelly split...i rhyme intelligent...so smart from the start of
>this verse

>...cause charity from the stripe is
>free to throw punches...my speed is slow lunges...you chutes
>and ladders....
>the name its told bladder "im gonna piss on
>you"....

overall, good battle.