Okayplayers, time to drop the ice packs, rinse and spit, cuz Photo is walkin' round the ring in a thong with a #2 card and the bells bout to ring..... once again I'm gonna post your name and your opponent’s name. (Just as in round one match-ups were randomly chosen. Its the luck of the draw.) You have until 10am EST on Wednesday to put ya verse in my INBOX …(remember my INBOX...not email.) I will post both verses as soon as they hit my inbox ..if ya late you get DQ'ed …so you lose .. We had a lot of DQs in round one. Lets try to stick around this time people.

FYI, as a result of the DQs we were 1 emcee short, so Instant Axis has been added as an alternate.

The match-ups are as follows......

nuke vs Prolif

Biohazard vs southernboy_423

hdub vs Zin

MiracleRic vs Rajeniro

MCee vs def1

Whateva vs Instant Axis


Sound the bell........

PS - also to keep everything neat, pls keep all ish talkin' and ran-dumb idle talk in replies to the ish talk thread below.

Reply Here

best matchup here:

dub vs. zin

mos def watching.

finally ya'll can stop all the talk and just rhyme. i'm tired of seeing the back and forth so lets get it out once and for all and then just move on to some otha ish. feel me.

i like almost all the matchups

some of the dq's disappointed me

but oh well

n/m

lol, yeah right. Shakeet and Prolif in the FIRST round? Not random. Good promo though. HDUB and Zin in the second round? AFter the way they been poppin off to each other? Random? Ummmmm, no. But still good promo.

wanted to see dub go at it with Ric.
If it was up to me it woulda been:

hdub vs MiracleRic

Instant Axis vs Zin

Whateva vs Prolif

nuke vs Rajeniro

and the rest could stay as is...
Biohazard vs southernboy_423

MCee vs def1

then I guess it was fate, haha. lookin foward to readin some of these

get at me bad gurl

when it comes to me ill send it in----------- as of now the mood hasnt struck me yet

besides we even if i did send it in right now- we need to be the grand finale of this shit anyways

so i wanna see them posted tomorrow morning

so what your saying is you need more time
....know one throw my other verse out i'm gon
na write one forreal ...

if you were the king you would get to set the schedule

you're not

i havent even started with you yet

people said they tired of the shit talking- we've said enough back and forth let's just spit

Whateva:
Knowone locked salt in a cage wit a slug
A spliff, and a fifth of henny in a cage wit a thug.
A thug killing henny wavin fifths pumpin slugs
into Instant Axis and out of his anal plug
spliff half dead, just a roach, wait, killed it
bad approach, hope you kissed ya fate before you sealed it
I'm beyond your reality I'm passed the truth
I'm naturally occuring, ahk, you massed produced
Get more green than Micks in Boston Massachutes
a black tee and timb boots, respected without suits
in major urban disputes we commense with arms abuse
In the city of the Roots ya best friend is a truce
Axis gets splattered like mixin cookin batter
Had to pry ya chick lips off my shit before you had her
Taught her how to William Mark Felt before you bagged her
Ironic like a physicists askin "what's the matter?"
I'm destroying Axis's powers with internet chatter
Cali nigga not brawlin is appaulin to me
Can't type enough periods to stall a defeat
Off sets, I'm protected like bubble wrapped packages
Director slash bad cop, I double tap actresses
I'm too much, you have me, too vexed to get nice
too gutter, like ya avi, reach and get hit twice
I don't need a star or a compass for direction
I produce more blow than a woodwind section
Instant Axis get blown from this dimension to the next one
Rookie, study the masters before you actually test one
See yall in round 3....


Instant Axis
AX ABOUT ME...BRIZZLE AX ABOUT ME!!!!

its like old leather belts sever ya flesh and burn...i be like whateva whateva with cats that think they clever...with that in turn i stash the urn...let ya ashes burn...say la v extract the germ...i perm cats on ocassion...straightin ya thoughts out...pull bait thru ya jaws mouth and blatantly call out..."hook line and sinker!!!"...the reeper so grim tell a friend to tell a friend...i telegram and have Know One dancin at ya doorstep..."try again"(whoa!!)...i monopolize those that change clothes and be like "i suppose"...ice those with grills whateva kid...lies show thru reels...you pleather wiz...i rip thru shredder quick and lines is better writ...ya spine is jelly split...i rhyme intelligent...so smart from the start of this verse not rehearsed i dispersed ya hearse quite snug in Photos purse...take a snapshot of the last drop youll ever see...cause rd 2 apologies is how to acknowledge thee...i vanish cats in combat...ask anubis nuke and H Dub who broke contract...another story returned to glory...side note..ignore me...im full of myself like the yankees and joe torre...ya flows corny..i saw ya first round..you had sikstyle...who couldnt win in that now...i just lost a vote..no sweat...i gotta give you somethin...cause charity from the stripe is free to throw punches...my speed is slow lunges...you chutes and ladders...this game aint for kids so lame ya dont matter...the name its told bladder "im gonna piss on you"....whateva dude

To me, this was close. No odds on favorite. Instant Axis came a little harder, but I like Whateva's flow better. I'm a scientific dude, so I liked this line: <Ironic like a physicists askin "what's the matter?"> Very clever.

Vote: Whateva

>"im gonna piss on you"....whateva dude

Axis, I loved that line...I've used it once or twice in my freestyle battles back in the cornfields of Iowa, yo the first person on these boards to quote me.... yo gangsta dawg

Vote: Axis

...my name was brought into this so im not even thinking about voting

BUT

i do want to say for the record that this clown ax and i havent battled yet and for him to claim any kind of victory over me is complete bull

anyways this was pretty close- i've seen much better from both of you these two verses are pretty weak if either of you had actually brought it like you normally do for the tourney you would have clearly smoked the other one

" and H Dub who
broke contract"

meaning we were going to battle...you kept saying my time will come but after i snubbed anubis and nuke...your challenge was no where to be found...you should really disect the shit before you politik about it...you talk a good game cuzzin but to me you will never really be shit and with that said..it doesnt really matter...you do you...peace.

our time still will come when its right on my schedule

you want to do that shit on your timetable then call me out otherwise shut the fuck up and wait your turn

so lets see...your bitter cause i shit on you in rhyme and then when i point out how you was crying and challenging me saying our time will come you bitch up and tell me to wait my turn like you an OKP god now...this is real funny and then you act like i even care where you stand in the matter...you a pawn duke...you will always be a pawn....i dont worry about you...i dont make posts about you...i shit on you in a rhyme that wasnt even all about you but yet ya pantie got all in ya ass and you just itchin to argue...you aint Photo and you hold no weight in this issue...if anything...you should drop it and keep workin on your beats...im not gonna reply to this anymore cause you seriously aint worth my time and id shit on you in real life...you look like a goober in ya pic if thats you on the soundclick page..get the fuck on yo..comedy!!

...wasn't a post about me then i dont know what is


you dont care about me but you peeping my soundclick?

and putting my name in your verses

ok dog you right


by the way- i might not be the best looking man in the world but i dont need the internet to find a wifey like some people

:P

Instant Axis takes it

>Whateva:


>Had to pry ya chick lips off my shit before you had her
>Taught her how to William Mark Felt before you bagged her

only reason I knew that was Deepthroat was cause I was gonna use that for a line, haha

>Cali nigga not brawlin is appaulin to me
>Can't type enough periods to stall a defeat

got him on his written style, which was my main issue tryin to read his, its written like he's having an asthma attack

this was pretty solid the whole way through, no 'mo.

>Instant Axis:


>ice those with grills
>whateva kid...lies show thru reels...you pleather wiz...i rip
>thru shredder quick and lines is better writ...ya spine is
>jelly split...i rhyme intelligent...

you had some nice runs flow-wise like here, I could actually follow it to a beat in parts like this, but you lost me in some other parts.


>im full of myself like the yankees and joe torre...ya
>flows corny..i saw ya first round..you had sikstyle...who
>couldnt win in that now...i just lost a vote..no sweat...

I didnt really like this part for some reason. not really sure why. nah for real though, I almost didn't vote cause of this line haha, but fuck that. I like how you come off with confidence in lines like this, and you got some good imagery too, just hard to follow your flow, prob easier for people who know you.


vizzote 4 Whateva

dang, i try not to vote for dudes i know for the simple fact its always going to be easier for me to read than someone i don't because i've heard them and know exactly how they would sound spitting it. i'ma just throw out the flow category cause my vote would be biased based on the aforementioned. so that said i vote Ax on the strength his punches were harder. point blank.




insert the random "just cause they boys" rant here.



.

haha, nah man I feel you. big part of this is being able to understand the flow, you just happen to get it cause you know him, I didn't cause I don't. it's all a style thing anyway, if it's hot to you more than the other one then you should vote for it. I just think hed get more votes if he had a structure that was easier to follow along with, cause it's hard for some people to see where the rhyme pairs match up. Some people don't have a problem reading it like this though, I just usually see it easier if it's written in bars, or something of that sort.

whateva's verse didnt hit me until the mass produced line, but from then on, it was solid, clever shit, but the flow coulda been iller...

Ax was solid all the way thru and had the best image with that KnowOne dancin at your doorstep shitn (that shit had me get up and run from the comp laughin), i do know ax and know how this would sound and i think this is the first time ive felt his "flow" as much as my own

whateva - had the more clever punches
ax - had the hottest/most humorous punch/image

whateva - flow was straight
ax - flow was heat

whateva - a small chunk of filler
ax - a lil filler but better spaced

my first instinct was draw and in the edit ive changed my mind

whateva's wasnt as clever as i first thought, and frak's had swag

AX wins

Vote: Instant Axis

this was close...seen betta' from both....one had betta flow, the other had betta blows...

vote: Whateva

"duck cause i struck with the soul of motown/my central broadcasting systems is low down" -- gza

...put me down for whateva

heads have accused me of hating before

i cant let the better verse lose simply cause my name got brought into the situation

they both flowed well but ax wasnt really throwing them gut busting punches

whateva came with a whole heap of them that deep throat line was only one of a bunch- it wasnt even close

you know what...im leading in this battle but just take me out if young cats is gonna bitch up and pull shit like this...just take me out the tourney...seriously...if i win...dont even put me in the next round...this is the exact reason i didnt sign up to begin with...cats is bitches yo...i easily won this shit...but yeah...drop me from the tourney...i knew i shoulda just stayed out the shit...for real H Dub...you got to be the biggest pussy on this site...apologies to you fine females on the board but this pussy is just gushin!!

i aint even the only one who voted against you

but go ahead keep bitching

if deep down you knew your shit was as hot as you say i think you'd be less insecure and able to take a few knocks

this is a battle tourney, you gonna quit cause cats taking this seriously?? come on mang! you gon' fuel hdub wit punches, stick around, and maybe you can take it somewhere. i havn't seen anything that should force you to quit. seriously.

peace
~
BE' (c)Common Sense

Supporting The L♥ve Movement;
http://www.myspace.com/bartek

"with...cats is bitches yo...i easily won this shit.."

Not an easy win. We still counting. You only up by two votes. As far as I'm concerned, the two best emcees in this tourney voted for me, so I'm straight. Win lose or draw. Talent recognize talent. I'll walk away with that. Congrats on the battle though. Good luck if you make it to the next round.

if i win ima stay in it Know...just match me against....well...nevermind...the kid gonna lose this round anyway.....peace

lmao

n.m

because i haven't had the time to dig into verses and vote appropriately.
but i don't have to go to school or work tonight...
i'm just relaxing here watching the Finals so...


First off..

Overall Vote:

Whateva- 7.8
Instant Axis- 7.9

Reasons:

Whateva:

the beginning of a verse is so important.
it's where you literally pull your dick/pussy out and put it on your opponent's forehead.

Your beginning:

>Knowone locked salt in a cage wit a slug
>A spliff, and a fifth of henny in a cage wit a thug.
>A thug killing henny wavin fifths pumpin slugs
>into Instant Axis and out of his anal plug


well done. the last 2 lines could have been stronger.
but the first 2 lines made me pay attention.

Where you won:

better consistency, format, flow, some of your punches were heavier
(deepthroat,physicists,periods, bubblewrap,director slash bad cop)

Where you lost:

weaker punches, less swagger, you let off the gas pedal in the middle of your verse:

>a black tee and timb boots, respected without suits
>in major urban disputes we commense with arms abuse
>In the city of the Roots ya best friend is a truce

in my humble opinion (humble for real fam) these were weaker lines that came across as filler.
it felt like you relaxed here instead of tearing his head off.
this is round 2 of a tournament...every word counts.



Instant Axis:

beginning:

>AX ABOUT ME...BRIZZLE AX ABOUT ME!!!!
>
>its like old leather belts sever ya flesh and burn...i be like
>whateva whateva with cats that think they clever...with that
>in turn i stash the urn...let ya ashes burn...say la v extract
>the germ...i perm cats on ocassion...straightin ya thoughts
>out...pull bait thru ya jaws mouth and blatantly call
>out..."hook line and sinker!!!"...


Outstanding. heavy, heavy confidence...heavy, heavy swagger.
imo, that last line alone was worth about 3 of whateva's punches.
i literally laughed out loud.
And that's what a battle is about...the 'Oh-Shits!'.


where you won:

basically what i said above...plus heavier punches..and tripled rhyme schemes

where you lost:

you let off the gas in the middle of your verse as well.

and

format, format, format. i'm sayin, your style is your style.
but in typing the way that you do...all of this was probably lost on half the board:


>...lies show thru reels...you pleather wiz...i rip
>thru shredder quick and lines is better writ...ya spine is
>jelly split...i rhyme intelligent...so smart from the start of
>this verse

>...cause charity from the stripe is
>free to throw punches...my speed is slow lunges...you chutes
>and ladders....
>the name its told bladder "im gonna piss on
>you"....

overall, good battle.

I like your analytical skills, blaksilence -- Although I might not have paid as much attention to detail and you did -- But I have to co~sign & ditto on EVERYTHING you said here -- ;)

This battle was damn nice -- But I think Axe had the sharper edge in the outcome -- (Cut a lil' deeper/made more blood puddles) -- :P


*AXE~MEISTER*

Great analysis. I had to reply to this. I'm seeing some weaknesses in my verse now.

Whateva had the upset til this 'I produce more blow than a woodwind section'.
way to call yourself out man.
____________________________________________________________

A wise man sees failure as progress,
a fool divorces his knowledge and misses the logic
(c) canibus - poet laureate 2

i think he meant blows. I hope so at least, haha

seriously.

thaats how i took it but it coulda been blows, but my blow as in the drug woulda been hot

....somebody just failed street 101 lol

nah, only rich white people deal with coke, coke aint street, who actually calls it blow...but u knew what i meant

blow me

>who actually calls it blow...but u knew what i meant

according to this quote right here you did

you cant say im wrong cause nobody calls it that while saying at the same time that you meant to say coke

its kinda contradictory

lol

this has got ot be the most analyzed line of the tourney

.....funny shit!



....and so it goes, im at it again. Fix ur fucking face, Im in the building!

http://www.soundclick.com/band/5/youngsleep_music.htm

or that sweet cocaina (c) tony montana. yo whateva, let me know, I'll drive down to philly right now, I just want one more hit and then I promise I'll stop, for real this time. *scratches neck and shoulder*

now he meant 'blows' but it still has the double interpretation,
and for someone calling Frak a rookie, that's a rookie mistake.
btw Whateva.. other than that line it was a solid verse

____________________________________________________________

A wise man sees failure as progress,
a fool divorces his knowledge and misses the logic
(c) canibus - poet laureate 2

I'm figuring out now that he already has a following. I didn't even know.

on first take ....i was like draw ....but after re reading the shit ....yeah frak got in him .... yeah ....
whateva you posted a good verse ...i just think ax came alil bit hotter and i wasn't even gonna vote on this shit

very very close, but i give the vote to whateva
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www.soundclick.com/theunion1 <---listen to my songs
only a true geek can peep how much worth this is
-mf doom

MCee:
Def1, I wouldn't let a Def1 hear you,
No fear fa dudes who spit pointless like lightin fires in pools,
No one ta compare me to, i'm rarer danna lion chased by caribou,
I'm cannibal, like animals, in zoos widout food,
Why you spit, i'm tryna solve dat mystery like Scooby Doo,
I guess you similar ta Keys, you got niggas sayin boo,
Maybe Mike Jones too, say ya name, dey like who?
Def1, worthless, you can't trade pennnies fa jewels,
Ya bumb rap get smashed, lunged at da sun when we clash,
Hungry fa dis like a fat nigga waitin fa a snack,
Crush you like Big Pun wit da flow, matta fact,
Da mic crushed in my grasp son, brush up on ya act,
Iss no contest, i'm hotter by da largest margine,
Armor anna shield couldn't fend you from my pen's offense,
Mentally scarred like concentration camps was in my bars,
I shit on emcees, yo ass needa stop fartin', peace


def 1:
I would bring the dopest shit to have you open with
but my spoken script at its worst is to dope for this
i'll have you choke on piss i'll leave you with a broken fist
after you try to cope with this, you better be hoping kid
you're nothing you gotta be joking bitch
thinking you bring anything dope or sick, Im over this
so inclusion you're ruined Im including the bruising
concluding the shooting of dope verbs will soon then
demolish you and Im calling you
out just to see you falling through
my trap Im schooling you from pre-k to college dude
call me rude as I abolish you
dont fuck with me you'll be lucky see to escape by ducking me
i'll bust MCee you aint shit to me
you think you're dope everyone else thinks differently
try to get rid of me you got be kidding me
Im the epitome of skill so you must be shitting me
I thought you we're tickling me when you was hitting me
its just common sense that I'll bring out the bitch in you
Im like chick-fil-a cause Im serving chicken dude
you must be stupid to battle me turn you quick to a casualty
skill is something you lacking see I'll have you rattled b
like you was a babies toy you're not even a wack mcee
you're below that I'll have you choke back
on every word and every line that you wrote cat
you aint dope cause i dont smoke crack
and I just smoked you and left you with burns to the 3rd degree
I won this shit before you even had a chance to murder me
but you wouldnt have accomplished that niether
this shit was nothing I consider this taking a breather

"Def1, I wouldn't let a Def1 hear you" ROFLOL

Def1 was okay, he came with some alright punches. But somehow, in a shorter verse, MCee was better.

Vote: MCee

these were both pretty basic- if it was up to me neither of these dudes would be in the 3rd BUT im gonna give it to def1 for several reasons

a) danna, dis, iss, these misspelled shits aren't necessary they instantly dumb down mcee's verse and make it harder to follow- that shit is just straight up annoying on the page- and it's not necessary to understanding the beat or rhyme

cee i've heard you on audio JUST WRITE THE WORDS DOWN you come off as a special needs person and you dont need to

you get annoyed whenever anybody responds to your shit saying the spelling errors detract from the rhyme- but this is peoples feedback- they do! if youre going to keep posting writtens and you want people to respond more positiviely to them listen to criticism

b)

im 99.9% sure i have recently heard this EXACT same line on the boards:

>I guess you similar ta Keys, you got niggas sayin boo,

and finally

c)

>Mentally scarred like concentration camps was in my bars,

as a jew i'll say go fuck yourself for this one

ive said before that i think being offensive can strengthen the humor or punch factors of a line- BUT - this line doesnt have any jokes in it just the offensive content

if you made me laugh hard enough i wouldnt have noticed that i should be offended but this didnt make me laugh at all it just annoyed me

Co-sign to this: ">Mentally scarred like concentration camps was in >my bars,

as a jew i'll say go fuck yourself for this one"

Auschwitz and Sachsenhausen were NO joke.

i figured out where the keys line was from- turns out mcee reused most of the verse he had for bartek for this round

automatic DQ here as far as i'm concerned

bartek not showing up got you into round 2- you lucky for that- it doesnt give you the right to only write one verse for two rounds

everybody else who didnt get an easy bye with a DQ has had to write one verse so far- why should you have to do half the work- especially considering that you had the easiest possible road to round 2

http://board.okayplayer.com/okp.php?az=show_topic&forum=20&topic_id=14604&mesg_id=14856


BarTek VS MCee
Posted by KnowOne, Mon Jun-13-05 08:33 AM

BarTek was DQ'ed
Here was MCee's verse:
Bartek jus stepped inta da wrong meat market,
Wrong target fa dis arsenist ta burn, regardless,
You lack ill rap like P Diddy's artists,
Iss mini me ta Shaq, don't get it twisted like da mob did,
Iss no contest, i'm hotter by da largest margine,
Armor anna shield couldn't fend you from my pen's offense,
Ya garbage, my bars abuse dudes like you,
Why you spit? I'm tryna solve dat mystery like Scooby Doo,
I guess you similar ta Keys, you got niggas sayin boo,
Maybe Mike Jones too, say ya name, dey like who?
Bartek? Who dat? Homie think dat he could rap?
Put ya pen down dog, an emcee, you ain't dat,
Off my track, off my scale, so, you could call me fat,
Crush you like Big Pun wit da flow, matta fact,
Da mic crushed in my grasp son, brush up on ya act, peace

I ain't know he did that. I didn't even read his first round verse. Aiiyo that's messed up. You gotta be creative enough to write somethin different specific to each person. I voted for this guy too. I did think he came a little harder than def 1. So I can't change my vote. But you right Dub, that should NOT be allowed. Emcees recycle words, yeah, but a whole 2 bar set?! Get outta here with that man.

>So I can't change my vote.

that's why im saying this should be an automatic dq a lot of people probably wont peep this exchange right here and they might miss this and you and aus voted before i could back up my claim of biting

as far as im concerned this is unprecedented grimyness- so it might require a little unprecedented grimyness on our parts as well

seems like def1's flow was better, but mcee came with funny ass punches that were too much to overcome.


MCee


****EDIT****

after reading dub's exhibit A I rescend my vote. can't recycle verses in a tourney.

RE: MCeezy
From: KnowOne
Date: Jun 14th 2005

Thanks fine if thats what you want. Just make sure to send me what you want me to post.


>Can I use the same verse I used against BarTek for my second
>round but change it up alittle?...peace

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dub...seriously, i think you gotta get off ya own dick n quit hatin

just cause he let you do it doesnt mean it was cool

i'll put it to you this way- you kknew you were on shaky ground with that otherwise you wouldnt have asked him

and you can say im hating but i had nothing bad to say about y'alls audios

they were aight- definitely better than anything i could do but these writtens are just not on point- specifically for the higher levels of this tourney

you can still say im hating if it helps you sleep at night tho- is shakeet hating too?

1)Because I figured if ya'll had read round one, you would see it was a reused verse and take that into accout.

2)Also in the last tourney DQ'ed verses were never posted. So in theory I could have reused a verse and no one would have ever known but Ric. (even though I really couldnt cuz I keyed it and didnt keep a copy. LOL)

3)And you have to take into account... if a persons re-used spit, was still hotter than his opponet... how can you vote against him. You can post what ever you want. If you inbox me 2 lines & the rest of the spit is just:
lgohslghsolgn;slng;SZ
sd;lgbSA:Ogfn:WL
sad;gs;dlgn;slgs
Thats what Im gonna post. Its up to the judges to decide. (Though Id feel sorry for anyone loosing to such a verse. LOL)

just so you know i don't think you did anything wrong-- people should be able to put up whatever they want as a verse

im just doing like you said and "taking it into account"

lol

people recycle verses all the time, we obviously werent supposed to see his original

so i'll judge the verses by themselves

MCee-had the better punches but was hit or miss

def1-had the iller flow and only decent punches

vote: DRAW

wasn't really feelin either of them. nothin special here, whoever makes it to the next round better step it up, see what's working for other people and try to implement stuff like that. good luck, peace

with the refurbished verse ......

Vote: MCee

although we should keep it new, i don't think dude should be penalized for reusing his own words...now had he reused somebody else's, that's some'n different....however, i thought both flows were too basic for a second round matchup...Def had more punches, even though it was a bit long

vote: Def 1


"duck cause i struck with the soul of motown/my central broadcasting systems is low down" -- gza

n/m

nm

Peace
~
BE' (c)Common Sense

Supporting The L♥ve Movement;
http://www.myspace.com/bartek

if Def1 would have shortened his verse
and added some weight to his punches
he would have taken it

because this is thorough wordplay/lyricism:

>so inclusion you're ruined Im including the bruising
>concluding the shooting of dope verbs will soon then
>demolish you and Im calling you
>out just to see you falling through
>my trap Im schooling you from pre-k to college du...


But MCee was just funnier/better

example:

>Def1, I wouldn't let a Def1 hear you,
>No fear fa dudes who spit pointless like lightin fires in
>pools,
>No one ta compare me to, i'm rarer danna lion chased by
>caribou,
>I'm cannibal, like animals, in zoos widout food,
>Why you spit, i'm tryna solve dat mystery like Scooby Doo,
>I guess you similar ta Keys, you got niggas sayin boo,
>Maybe Mike Jones too, say ya name, dey like who?
>Def1, worthless, you can't trade pennnies fa jewels,
>Ya bumb rap get smashed, lunged at da sun when we clash,
>Hungry fa dis like a fat nigga waitin fa a snack,
>Crush you like Big Pun wit da flow, matta fact,
>Da mic crushed in my grasp son, brush up on ya act,
>Iss no contest, i'm hotter by da largest margine,
>Armor anna shield couldn't fend you from my pen's offense,
>Mentally scarred like concentration camps was in my bars,
>I shit on emcees, yo ass needa stop fartin', peace

yea that's the whole verse.

Overall Score:

MCee- 8.2
Def1- 7.0

that was the worst battle i've ever seen. y'all should be 'shamed.
def wins because he had at least a hint of flow, but damn that was ugly.
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A wise man sees failure as progress,
a fool divorces his knowledge and misses the logic
(c) canibus - poet laureate 2

I was scanning you guys flows -- Lookin' for summthin' *Wicked* that stood out and smacked me in the face -- But I ain't see nutthin' extra~ordinarily nice, nahmean? -- :(

I mean ...

Both joints were aaiight -- (Not taking into account this court battle with "EXHIBIT A" and whatnot) -- *Photo Rolls Eyes* -- :P -- But I like the comedic value in MCee's flow -- However -- I respected the few punches & blows that Def1 threw out there too!

So ...

I'mmma go with *RESPECT* over comedy -- And give it to Def1 -- *Yuuup*


*Mos Def1*

flow and his shit was more witty to me...Mcee's shit just wasnt funny to me...i thought it was weak compared to what ive seen from him in the past.

mcee was more to the point, but didnt have many "oh shit!" parts except the cannibal line and the ending. btw great fuckin ending. at first i didnt even catch it then when i did, it was all over.

def1 ya verse was too long IMO. lotta filler. best line was the chick-fil-a line.

vote goes to mcee
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hdub:
stumble on stage in a daze off that haze
zin fumbled the play, i'm ablaze, like jungles in days-
of ‘nam- grand slam, heat so ill my rays broke the mold fungal
made the board say UNCLE!!!- i am- sick like a lungful-
of raid, no way, would zin ever flick better spit knifes-
on OK stays, watching my posts for days,
while guys pleasure his wife- he's in a flow play phase
yo, go away!!!! your ass is forty years old!!!
your shortys tears scold- her cheeks-
‘cause its clear you stroke keys not teets
a queer post fiending freak, absentee father
zin speaks and peeps for weeks
too geek to have to be bothered, by young skeet leaks
watching me compete - poppin’ weak flubbed critiques,
net creep, deadbeat- he’s crotching the dub beast
pour scotch- this tub’s peaced!!- is he deadmeat?? ROGER!!
expired- as far as BK’s concerned, you’s a dodger
fired after this verse- a forced pension earned- codger!!
in retorts i got penchant to burn- pyres- ya ancient like urns- tired
face, it's ya turn- RETIRE!! new sire- i leap higher-
than clowns in single bounds- i’m the best pound for pound,
in the ring you dying- the town crier sounds: DUB’S CROWNED!!!
zin’s downed- and out, at the end of his ride
he’s frowning now, wide- like 3rd i’s behind
those two fucking???
oh my- yo- TWO WORLDS COLLIDE!!!!!!!!!
MY EYES!!!!! no joke- ya size churns my insides-
now got my victory insured like some f-d-i’s--
C!- it’s me you can’t see, like your dick or your toes
plain to see D-U-B flows wit’ more kicks and more blows
sore Loes.- just LOSING.- i took your “E” like a raver
go do us all a favor- take your boasts back to paper
meet ya post maker- got you begging worse than PBS
not trying to see me yet- up in threads – “like heads- please vote for DVS!”
i beat the ess- out of ya best- buster douglas’ing vets
i’m’a be royalty- bet, just like a publishing check


Zin:
Invasion of the light in the ass rappers convention ….

*And this years “Light in the Ass Award” goes to …*

DUB…
I’m spittin shit from the OBGYN cause that’s…
the place you check pussy at!!!
Zin kicks shit in with Timb’s … to leave ya internals …with a dirt Swede and rubber infection … MONO ….STAT!!!
Code blue …we losing ‘em!!! …we losing ‘em …
ZIN bruising and abusing …him
AND light in the ass crews . ..
Deep in puss and glutes … to the top of my “Super” Tim boots
Fuck the votes …
Check the tower … for Pope smoke …
Cause even the Vatican …
Puffs agrees dub …has been done in …
Scrubs …needed perennial soning …
A mother’s love …double hugs or something …
Instead of rubber gloves …and fondling
I’m singing spirituals …to the fickle …
Then sending them … to Jesus Fed Ex(orcise)…
Cause I’m fed wit ….
Ric karaoke … so I’m leavin ‘em with their necks broke …
Found in lime socks, a feet out pine box and tux…
I’m like ooops!!! …I guess I messed up …
To bad ya best sucks …
but you don’t even suck the best …
Frontline got you beat …cause you suck like a bad RIC …
Prominent MC? …not in the least bit …
You allergic to hot shit …
You the equivalent microscopic … nut crops …
Growing … in my ball’s corn rows …
Ayoo the flo …
‘ll send him to the spot were ugly broads lick…
Affectionately …caressing the divot space between my ass crack and dick
You know that spot right before ya balls begins …
And then bring him his ROC chain … “ROCK HUTSON” that is …

edited:

b/c the verse originally posted was an old one and not the one zin really posted, i had to go back and re-read hdub's and zin's new one...and after doing that, i say zin stepped it up with the upper cuts and the hooks...flow was tighter this time too...dub, i thought ur joint was tough though

vote: zin

"duck cause i struck with the soul of motown/my central broadcasting systems is low down" -- gza

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I know I'll prolly catch heat for this, but I got to call it like it is...

Hdub, the beginning of your joint was some serious filler. To the point I thought that you would lose from your first four bars alone. But...lol...as you got into it, I started ROLLIN.

I read both of Zin's verses. -deep sigh- Hot. Sharp punches. But ummm...not a grade A verse. Well maybe it was, if it was a stand-alone. But against Hdub's, ehhhhhh naw sun.

From this point on, he murked you:

"on OK stays, watching my posts for days,
while guys pleasure his wife- he's in a flow play phase
yo, go away!!!! your ass is forty years old!!!
your shortys tears scold- her cheeks-
‘cause its clear you stroke keys not teets
a queer post fiending freak, absentee father
zin speaks and peeps for weeks
too geek to have to be bothered, by young skeet leaks
watching me compete - poppin’ weak flubbed critiques,
net creep, deadbeat- he’s crotching the dub beast
pour scotch- this tub’s peaced!!- is he deadmeat?? ROGER!!
expired- as far as BK’s concerned, you’s a dodger
fired after this verse- a forced pension earned- codger!!
in retorts i got penchant to burn- pyres- ya ancient like urns- tired
face, it's ya turn- RETIRE!! new sire- i leap higher-
than clowns in single bounds- i’m the best pound for pound,
in the ring you dying- the town crier sounds: DUB’S CROWNED!!!
zin’s downed- and out, at the end of his ride
he’s frowning now, wide- like 3rd i’s behind
those two fucking???
oh my- yo- TWO WORLDS COLLIDE!!!!!!!!!
MY EYES!!!!! no joke- ya size churns my insides-
now got my victory insured like some f-d-i’s--
C!- it’s me you can’t see, like your dick or your toes
plain to see D-U-B flows wit’ more kicks and more blows
sore Loes.- just LOSING.- i took your “E” like a raver
go do us all a favor- take your boasts back to paper
meet ya post maker- got you begging worse than PBS
not trying to see me yet- up in threads – “like heads- please vote for DVS!”
i beat the ess- out of ya best- buster douglas’ing vets
i’m’a be royalty- bet, just like a publishing check"

Yo I'm still laughing. I did NOT expect this. This was hotter than your first round joint.

Vote: Hdub

i think both coulda came better with this but dub had me laughin, zin had me chuckling

HDUB

Hdub:
Why oh why didn't you switch these lines around:

"C!- it’s me you can’t see, like your dick or your toes
plain to see D-U-B flows wit’ more kicks and more blows"

Your verse was solid, but not a lot of head spinning lyrics.
Your rhyme scheme is developing, but I think it can get in the way if not perfected. Sometimes all you really need is a good punch. All around great effort though.

Zin:
Nice strong concise output. Very little wasted words. Some of the rhymes were a stretch: Lyrics don't rhyme with field fence or gifted and so on.

Should have left this out:

"Hhhhhhhaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!!!!"

This is real tough, but I'm a sucker for shit like this:

"I’m a take it as herb to the second power
Or hermaphrodite with double the genitals
Hope for double the mentals
Cause the basic ass beats you spit writtens to
Will get you hemmed up and hacked … in this lyrical physical
Double the Help from … Zin twisting you …
Yukon Mag… dissing him would have to be a double issue …
Cause them Horrible Hideous writtens …hold no semblance of a real spitters verbitch "

That's sickening.


Vote: Zin

Zin had a nice flow but dub brought the shock and awe.
now i don't approve of throwing 3rd into it as a certain fact in there isn't true,
but damn if i didn't laugh at that one.

____________________________________________________________

A wise man sees failure as progress,
a fool divorces his knowledge and misses the logic
(c) canibus - poet laureate 2

n/m

not sure how that happened. I edited the thread and put the correct one in.

n/m

Vote: hdub

Daaammmmmnnnnnnn Mr. Dub -- You pulled out the grenades, missiles, & heavy artillery on this one, huh? -- *Whewwwwww* -- (I still see ~smoke~ on this battlefield, and I'm sure the battle's been ova with for awhile now) -- *cough~cough*

Zin did what I expected him to do -- Pulled out his brass knuckles, butterfly knives, and his 45. -- (Plus he took off his belt and commenced to whippin' butt -- :9

~HOWEVER~

Hdub came (((Ballistic))) and smacked dat ass with "Phazer Power" on the highest level!!! -- :o -- *Skurrrred A' Him*


It was close -- *No Doubt* -- But I gotta go with hdub's flow!

*Painfully Nice / Skillfully Executed*


~hdubble~licious~

i quit ...... lmao ......

This one definetely goes to HDUB. Without doubt.
Through better punches all together...

Peace...

H Dub....from the lungful line to the dodger line was hot....ya opening was weak as shit tho and thats important...you fell off after dodger and then came back strong with the 3rd I diss...shit was comedy but ya ending was weak as well and that shit dont cut it...you grab cats with the beginning and they remember the ending...you didnt do that in this verse


Zin.....the opening just had me dying son...straight comedy...you was hot all the way down to the jesus fed line and then the Ric shit threw me off and i think thru ya flow off as well...even tho its right because i do believe H Dub was the main one bitchin about Ric using the word "skeet" and then what do we see...Dub using the word "skeet"..i found that comical and he does raise eye brows with the similar flow at times but not all the time..but from "prominent emcee to the end you murdered that shit and to have a solid start and a solid ending...that to me wins this battle...Dub had the better line but you had more quality lines...peace.


good battle here tho

I think h-dub got this, zin had an alright verse but I didnt like his structure or flow, hdub had some good flow and some funny punches

vote-hdub

>I think h-dub got this, zin had an alright verse but I didnt
>like his structure or flow, hdub had some good flow and some
>funny punches
>
>vote-hdub

co-signed, hdub got my vote. had me laughin the whole time
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This is what I expected, a nice brawl so to speak. hopefully after this you two can just let it go and do something else cause i'm tired of the spam.

flow wise - i can't judge only because like i said before i know zin so when i read his verses i know exactly how he would flow it, i could go to the booth myself and spit it the same as he would cause i'm familiar with his steez. Dub's flow was very evident in this peice as well, but once again i aint voting on flow.

punches - WHEW!!! these jawns was heavy like 87 tyson vs. 87 tyson, non stop drama blows. dub had me rolling with the implied 3rd + zin collab (is that f'real?). Zin had me wilding with the Jesus line. Zin actually hurt himself trying to be an asshole like he always does by posting his original verse as a seperate post. it was WAY hotter than the one that he replaced it with.

With all this said it's a draw, i really wasnt feeling one over the other. but i will say that if zin woulda left it alone his first verse woulda got my vote, the punches in that had me rolling from beginning to end.

nuff respect to both. good luck to whoever advances. i expect to hear an audio from both of ya'll in the VERY near future. reading flows gets boring.......

now back to the conference call i'm supposed to be listening too.

Nuke:
Microphone cypher ripper spitting the ridiculous rhythms/
Beyond the O.K. im a player of prolific divisions/
Spit lyricisms that critically condition your wisdom/
Spitting so many bars im building you a lyrical prison/
When compositions sex your writtens your feeling my friction/
tearing up pussy lines with dick rhymes for lyrical kittens/
Nukes spitting percision/...
Spotting my lyrical victim/
with direct vision, and rock through her lyrical system/
Prolif a pigeon, with bird rhymes ubsurd lines for strangers/
spitting the herb rymes online like a cyber wangster/
I hear hearts racing, paragraphs split your formation like mathematic equations...
my microphones blazing/
Cypher for the pavement/...
Emancipation proclamation begin with a win and end statments of standing ovation/
Leave the track Bassing/...
Prolif will fall in amazement, holding aces thats spaded bringing the pain to the jaded/.
Need not provoke ya/...
But if rap was poker I'd smoke her with aces and jokers/
Control culture as if my name was Sosa/.
Fighting the dawn with my pen, suckas and bustas pretend/
My friends unlikely to bend under the pressure they fend/
Stressing the lessons of life undressing grin the lexuses spin gold chains faker than tin/
Im in it to win opponents fall again and again with competition simular to gin you tumble and spin/
hold no bars put throw scars whenever in battle a warrior on my sattle with ammo crushing the shadows she rattles/
Speak in sequence as royal as Pharoas, frequencies narrow lyrical apparel tear through you like arrows/
Never need weed my style is like trees, call me a wilderness/
so addicting whenever I breath, call me a cigarett/
Cold flows like high seas causing your ship to wreck/
attach to headphone jacks like I was nicorett/
Giving mics souls of destruction when taking hold/
Prolif is cold this moments gold, now actions are told/
Powerful notes/..
Flamboyant when annoyance afloat/
Ill like soar throats broken tight language from quotes/
Confuse her like a crack head to soap/
Public Speakers on Coke/..
A Reefa head with out his smokes/
Prolif will never be hard she's only clever to odds and the odds are gonna be against her when her mic is on/
Brittle bones in my palm, beats take the form of bombs, crush the mic, then evaporate her automatic arms/
Her weapons are gone her fear turns on she sobbs, the beginning is the end but the beggining was gone/
Im King of The Ring your a queen I'll send you a ticket/
Put on the stroll of Hunts Point and rename you Pro-Lick-it.

Prolif:
i spit for furious thirsts! was that a serious verse?/
dawg, u fresh outta' school - u need experience first!!/
gimme' tha' mic back!! i'mma' slay u on ya' sig/
cause' i ain't mike jack., so i'ont play wit' no kids!/
wit' Lif u can't spar - leave a smear through ya' thoughts!/
privileged just to face me par, u only here by default!/
and change that icon!! nuthin' blowing up but ya' chances/
u a bygone! - so much for showing up and advancing!/
this dude's a fluke! i'm 'bout to trash ya' luck sessions/
how u a nuke? can't find ya mass destruct weapons!/
aiyo, i'm 'bout to end tha' lie that stay up in ya' mouf'/
how u claimming N-Y, but u stay up in tha' house!?/
aint never seen a gun! that's fiction brutality!/
so u a grad AND a thug?! c'mon, lets stick to reality!/
o, u aint think i'd find out? son, that b.s. is searchable/
only battle u ever won was on a PS2 virtual!!/
understand i'm iller - and my spits a lil' versatile/
calling u out Stan Miller! - yeah i get a lil' personal!!/
click ya' cursor wit' aggression, cause u asking for Lif'/
and don't make me post that message where u was' asking for tips!!/
choose the board or the booth, where u can die orally/
to Nukes i couldn't lose if i made it a pri-ority!!/
too clever yo - u know i could spit at ya' ma'dam/
and if u ever blow, it's only cause i split through ya atoms!/
and if u live through this bout, then go gel wit' mom's bruh/
cause u barely made it out, like this was Hotel Rawan-da!/

Nuke, my man, lol, you came with it. You came with some body blows.
But Prolif came harder:

wit' Lif u can't spar - leave a smear through ya' thoughts!/
privileged just to face me par, u only here by default!/
and change that icon!! nuthin' blowing up but ya' chances/
u a bygone! - so much for showing up and advancing!/

^^So wrong to bring in the advance by default, but funny!^^

click ya' cursor wit' aggression, cause u asking for Lif'/
and don't make me post that message where u was' asking for tips!!/

^^I hope this isn't true. Either way, OUCH!!!^^


and if u live through this bout, then go gel wit' mom's bruh/
cause u barely made it out, like this was Hotel Rawan-da!/

^^Anybody who knows about what happened between the Hutu and Tutsi tribes of Rwanda, knows this was sick.^^

As much as it pains me to vote for the emcee who beat me, I have to be objective and unbiased. No disrespect Nuke, but...

Vote: Prolif by a mile

n/m

he just punched harder

nuke OD'ed on flow, and only had like 3 punches in a long ass verse...Lif got right to the point, and punched throughout the entire verse, Lif made me laugh, nuke made me bob my head (the flow was flawed in some places but practice makes perfect)

yeah ...i think it was just tooo long ...

Vote: Prolif

this was a tight battle- definitely agree with most of what heads is saying ^^^up there but for me nuke took this one

like everybody's said nuke had the better flow, but for me lif's punchlines just didnt land as hard as they did for others

it started off pretty sick

>i spit for furious thirsts! was that a serious verse?/
>dawg, u fresh outta' school - u need experience first!!/
>gimme' tha' mic back!! i'mma' slay u on ya' sig/
>cause' i ain't mike jack., so i'ont play wit' no kids!/

but in the second bunch it seemed forced- what you mean "slay you on ya sig" that one just didnt register for me

this right here was sick:

>u a bygone! - so much for showing up and advancing!/
>this dude's a fluke! i'm 'bout to trash ya' luck sessions/
>how u a nuke? can't find ya mass destruct weapons!/

but this is where it got weak for me- seems like lif is just throwing up generic insults and not paying attention

>aiyo, i'm 'bout to end tha' lie that stay up in ya' mouf'/
>how u claimming N-Y, but u stay up in tha' house!?/
>aint never seen a gun! that's fiction brutality!/
>so u a grad AND a thug?! c'mon, lets stick to reality!/

nuke never put up fake gangsta rhymes-- in fact he's always talking about how whack that shit is-- in this very battle he said:

>Fighting the dawn with my pen, suckas and bustas pretend/
>My friends unlikely to bend under the pressure they fend/
>Stressing the lessons of life undressing grin the lexuses spin
>gold chains faker than tin/

now maybe other folks dont know nuke like i do so this didnt stick out as much for them but to me it seems like this line is just a generic punch- i cant even begin to count how many rhymes i've seen on here where somebody criticizes someone for being a fake thug-- now granted for a lot of folks on here the jab mos def applies- but in this case it comes across tired

it also seems silly to throw out "college grad" as an insult- doesnt he get props for that??

in this next part the flow/rhyme scheme gets weak, versatile doesnt seem to fit in with searchable, virtual, and personal

>o, u aint think i'd find out? son, that b.s. is searchable/
>only battle u ever won was on a PS2 virtual!!/
>understand i'm iller - and my spits a lil' versatile/
>calling u out Stan Miller! - yeah i get a lil' personal!!/

this first punchline in this is funny but in the last two bars nuke's name is posted as if it's a diss

you calling him HIS name not A name- and it's not like it's hard to discover- shit's right there in his profile- shit comes across as filler

this next punch seems like another generic joke:

>click ya' cursor wit' aggression, cause u asking for Lif'/
>and don't make me post that message where u was' asking for
>tips!!/

i mean seriously- how many times have we all heard that same inbox joke on here??

even tho the middle of lif's rhyme came across weak to me the end was strong- the atom line was pretty good and the rwanda shit was sick

as far as nuke's goes to me he had two major weaknesses- first off the spelling errors- i know heads think its ridiculous that i bring spelling up- it's not hard to use a spellcheck- it just takes a second and it leaves the rhyme more polished

sometimes deciphering more serious errors takes the reader a second and they lose the intended flow

secondly- this verse is obviously more about flow than punchlines as everybody said- if this was an audio battle that would be sick but nuke needs to be making us laugh more for these written clashes-- still the flow was ill it's just a matter of trying to incorporate both that sick flow and the wittiness

still there were some hot lines in here too
i like the start:

>Microphone cypher ripper spitting the ridiculous rhythms/
>Beyond the O.K. im a player of prolific divisions/
>Spit lyricisms that critically condition your wisdom/
>Spitting so many bars im building you a lyrical prison/
>When compositions sex your writtens your feeling my friction/
>tearing up pussy lines with dick rhymes for lyrical kittens/

one gripe i have is that you say "lyrical" far too many times

for me the next bit was mostly filler but it did flow real well- and then these lines:

>Emancipation proclamation begin with a win and end statments
>of standing ovation/
>Leave the track Bassing/...
>Prolif will fall in amazement, holding aces thats spaded
>bringing the pain to the jaded/.
>Need not provoke ya/...
>But if rap was poker I'd smoke her with aces and jokers/
>Control culture as if my name was Sosa/.
>Fighting the dawn with my pen, suckas and bustas pretend/
>My friends unlikely to bend under the pressure they fend/
>Stressing the lessons of life undressing grin the lexuses spin
>gold chains faker than tin/


this shit was sick- using metaphor and also making points-- plus in the context of lif's verse the end of this section was just killer

then after the killer some more flowing filler- on audio i think a lot of this would sound great and hit hard but im looking for lines like these:

>Ill like soar throats broken tight language from quotes/
>Confuse her like a crack head to soap/
>Public Speakers on Coke/..
>A Reefa head with out his smokes/
>Prolif will never be hard she's only clever to odds and the
>odds are gonna be against her when her mic is on/
>Brittle bones in my palm, beats take the form of bombs, crush
>the mic, then evaporate her automatic arms/
>Her weapons are gone her fear turns on she sobbs, the
>beginning is the end but the beggining was gone/
>Im King of The Ring your a queen I'll send you a ticket/
>Put on the stroll of Hunts Point and rename you Pro-Lick-it.
>

ending real strong with these- the confusion part was my favorite in this section

so- nuke gets this one cause of better flow and cause the punchlines he did have were stronger- there was a lot of filler here and it definitely detracted from the strength of this verse tho this could have been a much stronger verse for nuke if it was shorter just including those sections i've highlighted

prolif came nice but needs to work more on getting sick patterns into the flow-- the punchlines in this one also seemed uninspired- in other shit ive seen from lif there were more unique punchlines like that rwanda shit<----by far the best line of this match

more of that and less of the same old "you's a wanksta" type shit and lif would have had me breaking ranks

feel free not to count this since me and nuke are admittedly peoples- but i couldnt resist throwing my 2 cents in

This is a hard one!

Both cats was scratchin' the surface -- But neither one got any ~DEEPER~ than the other IMHO!

I have to agree with hdub tho -- Nuke used the word lyrical -- a bit much!

lyrical prison/
lyrical kittens/
lyrical victim/
lyrical system/

I guess they were s'posed to rhyme in some way, but they were a lil' off base -- :(

And the spelling errors deterred from the solid~ness of the joint -- (It threw dirt on a somewhat polished flow)

Never~the~Less -- I really enjoyed the flow~stream of Nukes pCe ...

~HOWEVER~

Prolif's verses were corrosively compacted with tiny bits of bombastic blasts -- *Kinda ate through Nuke's explosions, nahmean?*

Lif's flow was str8 -- (And that's the truth) -- Even if the personality issues may not have been true -- (Based on dub's knowledge of him from a personal perspective *since he actually knows him*) -- But these lines wrapped it ^UP^ fa' me with a big fat shiny ribbon:

>and if u live through this bout, then go gel wit' mom's bruh/
>cause u barely made it out, like this was Hotel Rawan-da!/


Ummmmmmm -- I could call a DRAW -- Cuz I really like BOTH flows for different reasons -- But I'mmma go with Prolif -- Cuz his verse was short/sweet/& to the point!


*Prolif~erific*

Nuke:

Ya verse was a solid off the top jawn, but it was hellalong and lacked hard hitting punches. I felt like you were overcompensating for lack of solid, well formulated punchlines. Lot of wasted lines. With that said, your verse could have steamrolled through many of us, but I seriously believe you are facing this tourney's champ.

Prolif:

Once again. Not to sound like a dick-rider, but pound for pound, I don't think anyone in the tourney is seeing you. I don't see a lot of unnecessary wordage, entire sentences rhyme and still make a lot of sense. The punches are clever and hilarious. Ya cadence can be just a tad bit off at times:

"wit' Lif u can't spar - leave a smear through ya' thoughts!/
privileged just to face me par, u only here by default!/"

This was about four syllables off (and it can be depending on word usage). Remove "just" and you save your cadence without sacrificing a punch. Little edits like that IMO make an better flow.

Vote: Prolif.

it's not just about rhyming words nuke, it needs to make a little sense.

NUke started out real nice and if he cut that verse in half and left the bottom half off it would have been a closer battle....Lif just ate his ass...no question Nukes verse was too long and it hurt him...made me think my man Tek was spittin...lol...Pro takes this with better punches too.

prolif got this, his verse was sick, nuke you nice too but prolif came harder

so many tight punches. nuke ya verse was way too long.
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MiracleRic:
Im known as the grand-king,
Stomp in ya mouth til all u spit is hamstrings
Im charming belles, while disarming frail,
MCs that are see-thru as armandale,
I’ll plant ur tu-lips in garden hell,
stage left EDEN,
all eyes on me like beige flesh, cleavage,
they just vegans…rockin fur…
yellin…“when I get off your jock it hurts”…
blue balls? Nah, I furnish my cock with smurfs,
I impair cats from Fairfax, with a toxic verse
I’ll charge an air tax, til his optics burst
i eat text, serve ya a sweet death like a chocolate hearse
in order to win votes, ya kinfolk will have to assbet/bluff,
U only sick cause licked my hazmat nuts
Dickriders know that ric spits midas…I got that Aztec touch,
I’ll murk u, leave ya fam in a circle to pass that dutch
U passive mutts is sniffin at a mastiff’s butt
l bang duke, I’ll hang u up with flashius guts
shove zin in ya grave to leave ya casket crushed
*ya corpse screams “MORPHINE!”*
I should be tired of spittin classic stuff
I scorch teens, and emasculate this bastid’s huff
With massive weight
Leave u R.i.p., and not dude with the plastic face


Rajeniro757:
watch me burn you to the 3rd degree
like triplets in the sahara infected with VD
like richard pryor free basing in 1980
i spit infectious like dogs with rabies
welcome to Americas Next Top Tradgey
you'll be modeling toe tags after me
have you run to GD, crying please vote for me
air condition your brain with punchline symphony
some where beyond the sea,
there will be your limbs in a tree
feel the tenacity of the resurgency
your in jeopardy, an e-mergency
it's urgent see flow viscosity
visibly, off the meter eventually
the ferocity of my attack will be
a lyrical tsunami of massacre mastery
go back to working at applebees
and get me a long island ice tea

Ric:
"Im known as the grand-king,
Stomp in ya mouth til all u spit is hamstrings"

"stage left EDEN,
all eyes on me like beige flesh, cleavage,"

"With massive weight
Leave u R.i.p., and not dude with the plastic face"

-> all of these were top notch lyrical mastery

Rajeniro:
"watch me burn you to the 3rd degree
like triplets in the sahara infected with VD
like richard pryor free basing in 1980
i spit infectious like dogs with rabies
welcome to Americas Next Top Tradgey
you'll be modeling toe tags after me"

-> mad ill intro

vote: MiracleRic for the steady quantity of heat


"rip so many bars i should'a got a juror's doctorate" -- phonte

n/m

Aiiyo Rajeniro why was your verse so short? Was that a battle rhyme or a haiku? You started off hot man. You got me interested from the beginning, but it was way too short. You actually had good punches in there and everything. But the length is what killed you. And er, um, also this:

"U passive mutts is sniffin at a mastiff’s butt"

^^ROFLOL^^

Vote: Ric

...if raj had dropped a little longer he could have possibly built up enough steam to give ric a run for his money

seemed like ric just wants it more

i woke up at 7am on wed. and wrote that.
I mean i could of worked at it at work but i like to be in the mood when i write and it just wasn't there.
I really didn't want to be disqualified.

tell you the truth though fuck all i just wrote Ric got me i i diserve it. I knew in order to beat him i had to come with some off the wall shit but i didn't.

casket crushed ....nukka i'm not a player i just crush alot ....as much as i would love to see 757 represt ....he got you doggies ...
Rangerio .....we need to link up doggies ...

we should hook up , I'll try as soon as things calm down for me.

Vote: MiracleRic

...one of the best verses i can recall seeing from him in a while

definitely upping his energy level from what we say in round one

raj's was a pretty damn good verse but he was just out of his league on this one- it didn't have the same energy flow or wit

Ric just mopped the floor with Rajeniro's verse! -- *chuckles*


I could see Ol' Snagglepuss saying: Stage Left -- EDEN -- ;)


But forreal tho -- Both flows were nice & tight -- Yet, there's no doubt about it -- MIRACLERIC had more finesse, flamboyance and flame to his verses.


I'ont know how long you been flexxin' verses, Rajeniro -- But you need to pump a lil' mo' IRON in your diet -- :9 -- Cuz you're good boo -- But you still need to get your weight ^UP^ when you're boxxin' with heads like RIC!


Nice round from both of you! -- ;)


*Ric~A~Roni~

Rajeniro:

Honestly you did yourself in. Six more bars of that and you had him. The last line should locked away in a vault somewhere never to light of day. That's not a finisher.


Miracleric:

The last verse hit me seconds after I read it which made it all the more sweet. Solid output. Little wasted words and stinging punches. Your flow is hard to follow though. Your cadence turns on and off.


Vote: MiracleRic

i tried to over-tweek in two areas of the verse, surprised u caught that

i was going frantic trying to write the verse wed. morning.

both of yall were tight, but Ric got my vote. raj ur verse was nice length, dont think that u gotta spit mad bars all the time. i just think that the bars u had coulda been stronger. and your ending was weak as hell.
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sometimes simplicity is key...just dug his more...especially the "now go get me a long island ice tea" part,ha...he just sounded real relaxed like he aint got shit to loose...

blk

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Biohazard:
Southernboy, Just a hick from the south
You can't spit rhymes with those dicks in your mouth
With those rhymes I'm surprised that you're spittin' aloud
It's round 2 now, and I'm kickin' you out
My ambush rhymes are statlin', give you cardiac arrest
I'm stabbin through your arteries, your body and your chest
With your sense of artistry it's hard to be the best
Your flows are soundin' drunk like it's marguerita-fest
Man, you had the arrogance to enter this battle
Fuck that, it's time to put an end to your prattle
Race time, I got my car, you're bent in a saddle
You'd best go home now nd tend to your cattle
Calm down now, no need to throw a hissyfit
Those weak ass rhymes, man, it really gets me sick
Steppin' up to me, now that's some risky shit
You're better off tryin' out as 4th Dixie Chick

southernboy_423:
Im a verbal uni-bomba eating emcees like jeffory Doma/
A animal crazed like Hannibal a cannibal when I up on ya/
Startin wars like im osama make buildings on blocks crumble/
Spit thick like syrup and discipline kids but I aintcha momma/
And I lack those intolerant/
Dude don’t like cheese and beef,
He a vegetarian who’s lactose intolerant/
U reach but Im hard to get to, I get chu when I start to reach/
Start and I spark wit heat try reach and I slurr a speech/
I bang cats like a blood or crip bang a blood or a blood to a crip/
You aint hard better guard ya lip play hard and I start to trip/
His hands up wit no gun or a knife/
He better off getting on tracks just to run for his life/
This easy boy believe me boy/
I raised hell like teens playing wit weegie boards/
Im hyped and its ill u can write what u feel/
Fuc a battle verse u better off writing ya will/
Round two over “KNOWONE CALL WHO NEXT!”/
U couldn’t call round three dialing 1-800 Collet/

I guess Southernboy didn't read that whole bit about MCee reusing a couple bars from his round one verse (Start from hdub's "Exhibit A" post and continue from there). Southernboy reused his entire verse from round one.

n/m

.....after seein all the bullshit voting, and people bitching in the first round turned me off to writing another verse for round 2, i mean, damn look at this round same bitching and whinning.

......but be honest......my shit still hotter than yours.....Lmafo

if i wouldve wrote something differnet it was easy bank, your verse was garbage if u win its because people except more from me, not cuz your verse was hot, that shit was garbage.

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....and so it goes, im at it again. Fix ur fucking face, Im in the building!

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not that bio couldn't have come with it ...but even the old verse was hotter .....


southern

not that bio couldn't have come with it ...but even the old verse was hotter .....


southern

i keeeed, i keeeeed.

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A wise man sees failure as progress,
a fool divorces his knowledge and misses the logic
(c) canibus - poet laureate 2

this is the worst verse i seen from u southern

the last line is what took it for me in bio's verse

Bio, i thought u should have stepped up the imagery a lil' more for a 2nd round battle...

"And I lack those intolerant/
Dude don’t like cheese and beef,
He a vegetarian who’s lactose intolerant/"

this line alone was better than anything Bio brought....


vote:southernboy_423


"rip so many bars i should'a got a juror's doctorate" -- phonte

Southernboy, I've seen better from you man. You could have won this, but you didn't come hard enough.

Vote: Biohazard

n/m

Vote: Biohazard

...southern is right- his verse was better than bio's (still against someone else in this tourney it would have barely stood up)- but once again this is recycled shit and thats just whack no matter how good the rhyme

bio- you got lucky on this the verse wasnt terrible but it was pretty whack- specifically this section:

>Man, you had the arrogance to enter this battle
>Fuck that, it's time to put an end to your prattle
>Race time, I got my car, you're bent in a saddle
>You'd best go home now nd tend to your cattle

i know some cats don't agree with me on this but to me coming up with new hotness each round is one of the major things that this tourney (in fact the act of keystyling as a whole) is all about- re-using verses kind of defeats the purpose of the board battles, i always am looking for originality so this recycled ish just is the worst to me

To both of you!!! -- x(


I ain't a battlecat -- So y'all would prolly "STILL" whip my butt in a New York minute -- *chuckles* -- But between the terrible mis~spellings of southernboy -- and the Mickey Mouse rhyme patterns of Biohazard -- I'd still get a few good scratches, kicks, & bites in, B~4 I dropped to da floor! -- :P


I'm not impressed!




NO VOTE!

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A wise man sees failure as progress,
a fool divorces his knowledge and misses the logic
(c) canibus - poet laureate 2

i dont see that bad of a spelling problem in it, and alot of times i spell a word a certain way cuz thats how i say it so in my verse thats how i want it so be said, u dig!

....besides this didnt have to get voted on from the beginning, i lost the whole feel for the tourney in round 1.



....and so it goes, im at it again. Fix ur fucking face, Im in the building!

http://www.soundclick.com/band/5/youngsleep_music.htm

You're right -- It's not that bad! -- :P


>Im a verbal uni-bomba eating emcees like jeffory Doma/

*Jeffrey Dahmer*


>I raised hell like teens playing wit weegie boards/

*Ouija Boards*
I know it don't look like it's spelled -- But it ain't "WEEGIE", aaiight?


>U couldn’t call round three dialing 1-800 Collet/

*1-800 Collect*


But it's like this sweetie -- When you're writing on the bullshit -- Just freestyling and whatnot -- You ain't gotta polish yo shit and make it shine, cuz you're just bullshittin' and having fun.

But if you call yo'self being in a "TOURNAMENT" -- You need to dot all your "i's" and cross all your "t's" and be SURE that there aint' NO REASON for your work to be scrutinized or held ^UP^ to a magnifying glass for disapproval.

Your work NEEDS to be the BEST THAT IT CAN BE in an arena such as this! -- Like you're taking a final exam -- *Like during the school year you can jack around and make "C's" & "D's" -- (If you ain't applying yo'self) -- But come TEST time & report card time, you betta get yo shit str8 and make a damn 100%! -- *chuckles*


You're right tho -- You didn't have "THAT MANY" spelling errors this time -- I've seen worse -- :9

2 mistakes Photo

i didnt know how he spelled it like that - Dahma, and i still wouldve because of how i spelled uni-bomba.(that just how i write,
its a way to make me remember how to say it when i spit it over something)

i admit to mispelling weegie. i forget so i went wit the best thing
that got it across.

and the 1-800 thing, come on, u playing right.

its not a spelling be wit me, its a jotted verse, but i promise from now on Photo i will revise my shit instead of just hitting post message, i promise no more mispelled words or typos



....and so it goes, im at it again. Fix ur fucking face, Im in the building!

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Southernboy_423:

At first I was going to write about how disappointed I am in your verse until I reread it. This is solid. Each line brought a certain punch to it. You didn't go after Bio enough though.

Biohazard:

Solid verse. ABCish, but effective. The last verse was a haymaker.


I wanted to give this to SB, but this is a battle not just a lyrical showcase. You have to go after your opponent. Two fighters in a cage attack each other. They don't just show off their muscles, they put them to work. You didn't mention anything unique to Bio.


Vote: Bio

u right! thats how u vote, shawty


....and so it goes, im at it again. Fix ur fucking face, Im in the building!

http://www.soundclick.com/band/5/youngsleep_music.htm

Biohazard takes it. this was pretty shitty from both, but at least bio had a punch or 2
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A wise man sees failure as progress,
a fool divorces his knowledge and misses the logic
(c) canibus - poet laureate 2

but both of em were extremely wack. whoever wins step it up in the next round
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-mf doom

if im so wack, whenever u want to battle then leap frog.


....and so it goes, im at it again. Fix ur fucking face, Im in the building!

http://www.soundclick.com/band/5/youngsleep_music.htm

>if im so wack, whenever u want to battle then leap frog.

number 1 i dont battle. 2 what made u choose to challenge me when a host of other cats said bio's was better? just wondering. and u said urself u couldve done much better, so y get mad when i say that ur verse was wack, meanin that when u dont try it aint good?
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-mf doom

no u didnt say the verse was wack, u said i was

and i can care less about that verse, i been posted another verse just to show people what another verse wouldve been like, but i dig u.
u wasnt saying me u was talking about that verse, u good homie.



....and so it goes, im at it again. Fix ur fucking face, Im in the building!

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nuke 1 vote vs Prolif 11 votes Prolif continues

Biohazard 8 votes vs southernboy_423 3 votes Bio continues

hdub 8 votes vs Zin 5 votes hdub continues

MiracleRic 9 votes vs Rajeniro 2 votes

MCee 8 votes vs def1 6 votes MCee continues

Whateva 5 votes vs Instant Axis 10 votes Ax continues