11399, was nodding around here: Posted by soulchild, Wed Aug-25-04 11:51 AM
and you were still searching for a working pay phone to anonymously call your mother from and curse her out for naming you beautiful but not giving you the right backbone to walk straight enough blaming your curved spine for always leading you in the wrong directions
in cycles, even
that's why you won't be able to stop yourself from dialing his number instead of calling your mother & you'll hope (not pray) that the static on the fked up pay phone you found will drown out your breathing cause this magical wordsmith type nigga might recognize it & put it in his next poem entitled "leave me alone"
this piece reads well. i think that's true with most of your work. one thing flows into the next, then the next, then the next. i also liked that you used 2nd person.
soul.
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