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jsmoovjr

Tue Jun-12-01 02:52 PM

  
"Romanced Despite HIV"


          

© 2001 Marineke Poems

There is no tug of war
Because he broke that epithet bar
Love romanced us with friendship's perennial foundation
Mind in check way before his approaching 40
Body fly on some Lenny Kravitz track star tip
Old school Brutha hair reflecting jazz
When we were colored
Sweet calming like almond oil and fresh ready booty fownk after a steeping bath
Prism butterfly jitters
Giving cold nipples a run for their foreplay money.

There is no masturbating war.

Blessed up and down
He reckons delegating hexes from Pentecostal bishops
Midwest Jehovah's Witnesses and Baptist deacons
Embracing retrovirus cocktails everyday
While inviting me to accompany over Kung Pao, revealing leg rubs
Quake with gratitude and future hospital days
Strongly we stare and love and hurt and live and breathe each token and scar and smile and sigh in color
No bother or hurry
No hey Little Walter
We are life's fury embodied in manly love
No tears for human death
No years regretted between age difference or fabulous wrath
Love birthing joy unjettisoned by any community jury.

Waves are in sight for a virgin shore.

"All that glitters ain't gold."

  

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Topic Outline
Subject Author Message Date ID
RE: Romanced Despite HIV
Jun 12th 2001
1
RE: Romanced Despite HIV
jsmoovjr
Jun 13th 2001
9
RE: Romanced Despite HIV
Jun 12th 2001
2
Kisses Linger--I Neva Misses! ;-)
jsmoovjr
Jun 13th 2001
10
RE: Romanced Despite HIV
Jun 13th 2001
3
RE: Romanced Despite HIV
Jun 13th 2001
4
Is it the way / you love / me baby?
jsmoovjr
Jun 13th 2001
11
RE: Romanced Despite HIV
Jun 13th 2001
5
wow...
Jun 13th 2001
6
i am not the crying type
Jun 13th 2001
7
Like Lenny Said, "Take Time"
jsmoovjr
Jun 13th 2001
13
wow...
Jun 13th 2001
8
HIV & It's Lessons Happen to Anyone
jsmoovjr
Jun 13th 2001
12
ARCHIVE
Jun 13th 2001
14
I agree!!!
Jun 13th 2001
15
Who does the archiving?
jsmoovjr
Jun 14th 2001
16
the moderator B
Jun 14th 2001
17
      i didn't want to read it
Jun 14th 2001
18
           Don't Hold Onto The Pain ... Hold Onto The Memory.
jsmoovjr
Jun 14th 2001
20
beautiful
Jun 14th 2001
19
Da Good Stuff
jsmoovjr
Jun 15th 2001
21
gotdamn....
Jun 17th 2001
22
The Glory of God
jsmoovjr
Jun 17th 2001
23
RE: Romanced Despite HIV
Jun 17th 2001
24
this is straightup "funkdified flow-e-tree"
Jun 17th 2001
25
Jun 18th 2001
26
English please, not French.
jsmoovjr
Jun 18th 2001
27
i likeD thiS...
JLC
Jun 18th 2001
28

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1. "RE: Romanced Despite HIV"
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>Strongly we stare and love and
>hurt and live and breathe
>each token and scar and
>smile and sigh in color
>
these were my favorite lines. this peice was different & i mean that in a good way . i like this.

"don’t have to bump this, but please respect it"-tupac

"i been weak & i been strong, been through the fire, been through the storm"-amil

"push & pull, struggle with the knot"-nikka costa

"...if i stop today, it was still worth it-even the terrible mistakes that i have made & would have unmade if I could, it was still worth it"-GIA


“& those scars i had hidden wit smiles & good fuckin lay open & i don’t know i don’t know any more tricks
i am really colored & really sad sometimes “ ntozake shange

"I realize that it's possible to cry For something other sadness" madawaka

  

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jsmoovjr

Wed Jun-13-01 07:53 AM

  
9. "RE: Romanced Despite HIV"
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>
>>Strongly we stare and love and
>>hurt and live and breathe
>>each token and scar and
>>smile and sigh in color
>>
>these were my favorite lines. this
>peice was different & i
>mean that in a good
>way . i like
>this.

*blush* All praise to God. I'm just a vessel that He decided to bless and enlighten so that others may see and perpettually benefit from reflections of themselves.

Peace, Love & Blessings.

James, aka Jsmoovjr or Marineke

"All that glitters ain't gold."

  

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2. "RE: Romanced Despite HIV"
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yo j,

that was really touching...for reasons that you and perhaps some others here know... I remain hopeful.... and continue to be showered/blessed by your rhytes...

*kisses* mane

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jsmoovjr

Wed Jun-13-01 07:58 AM

  
10. "Kisses Linger--I Neva Misses! ;-)"
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>yo j,
>
>that was really touching...for reasons that
>you and perhaps some others
>here know... I remain
>hopeful.... and continue to be
>showered/blessed by your rhytes...
>
>*kisses* mane
>
>25

You are my reflection who has embraced the mirror we uphold fearlessly. Have mercy in never letting go of our hands while standing in the mirror with me. All Praise To God.

Peace, Love & Blessings.

James, aka Jsmoovjr or Marineke
*Matching the number in your handle in 14 days*

"All that glitters ain't gold."

  

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3. "RE: Romanced Despite HIV"
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These two stanzas had the most emotional impact for me and sealed this poem home. It was eloquent and beautiful read..

>Strongly we stare and love and
>hurt and live and breathe
>each token and scar and
>smile and sigh in color
>
>No tears for human death
>No years regretted between age difference
>or fabulous wrath
>Love birthing joy unjettisoned by any
>community jury.
>
>


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4. "RE: Romanced Despite HIV"
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Quake with gratitude and future hospital days
Strongly we stare and love and hurt and live and breathe each token and scar and smile and sigh in color
No bother or hurry


That was real heartfelt
Ive never read any poem like this
its love

  

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jsmoovjr

Wed Jun-13-01 08:02 AM

  
11. "Is it the way / you love / me baby?"
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>Quake with gratitude and future hospital
>days
>
> Strongly we
>stare and love and hurt
>and live and breathe each
>token and scar and smile
>and sigh in color
>
> No bother
>or hurry
>
>
>That was real heartfelt
>Ive never read any poem like
>this
>its love

Share the love, my friend. Owned neither by your nor me, love is for securing respect and setting all of us free.

Peace, Love & Blessings.

James, aka Jsmoovjr or Marineke

"All that glitters ain't gold."

  

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5. "RE: Romanced Despite HIV"
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beautifully written, I felt sad, calm, curious and happy all t once, very touching.
peac

  

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6. "wow..."
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that peice really showed true emotion, and lets an outsider looking in see the heart and soul of such a relationship. Everything about this peice was beautiful, the language, the imagery, and the soul. Much props due...no wonder it was published...

Peace,
Serena

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7. "i am not the crying type"
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i am the get upset (sumtimes mad & violent) turn on sum music, and let tears fall type tho. but u wont catch me jes a cryin ova sum BULLSHIT that otha ppl cry about...otha womyn...men...and im not a child..but its the 20th anniversary.

and i read newsweek last week, and the face of Promise, made me wanna write a poem bout dis, den a vey dear man in my community passed on after 09 yrs of strugglin w/ this...& i guess i didnt realize how many of my own are hurt by this, until i saw the numbers, and saw the baybees, and decided to be tested myself,
and thank God for his continous mercy, and my continous strength, and then i apllied for this job wurkin w/ HIV positive inmates, and sumwhere in all of this i read ur poem too, and saw Jerry's face (& had to STOP myself frum CRYIN cuz i knew he must miss his daddy that just passed on) and i knew i had to make my own poem bout dis, but its gonna be bout dis womyn, and then ill prolly come back & write one for jerry too, and in it ill be sure to say that for the first time i was bout ready to deep down cry,

and not just let a few tears fall.

Embracing retrovirus cocktails everyday
While inviting me to accompany over Kung Pao, revealing leg rubs
Quake with gratitude and future hospital days
Strongly we stare and love and hurt and live and breathe each token and scar and smile and sigh in color
No bother or hurry
No hey Little Walter
We are life's fury embodied in manly love
No tears for human death
No years regretted between age difference or fabulous wrath
Love birthing joy unjettisoned by any community jury.

Waves are in sight for a virgin shore.


"God is..She's like a motherly
Che Guevara, benevolent,
like 6 feet tall with dreadlocks,
a big machine gun and a
beautiful laugh... maybe."

~ okp DJ Scratch n Sniff

i just want chu to know
how i feel
how i feel

  

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jsmoovjr

Wed Jun-13-01 09:22 AM

  
13. "Like Lenny Said, "Take Time""
In response to Reply # 7


          

>i am the get upset (sumtimes
>mad & violent) turn on
>sum music, and let tears
>fall type tho. but u
>wont catch me jes a
>cryin ova sum BULLSHIT that
>otha ppl cry about...otha womyn...men...and
>im not a child..but its
>the 20th anniversary.
>
>and i read newsweek last week,
>and the face of Promise,
>made me wanna write a
>poem bout dis, den a
>vey dear man in my
>community passed on after 09
>yrs of strugglin w/ this...&
>i guess i didnt realize
>how many of my own
>are hurt by this, until
>i saw the numbers, and
>saw the baybees, and decided
>to be tested myself,
>and thank God for his continous
>mercy, and my continous strength,
>and then i apllied for
>this job wurkin w/ HIV
>positive inmates, and sumwhere in
>all of this i read
>ur poem too, and saw
>Jerry's face (& had to
>STOP myself frum CRYIN cuz
>i knew he must miss
>his daddy that just passed
>on) and i knew i
>had to make my own
>poem bout dis, but its
>gonna be bout dis womyn,
>and then ill prolly come
>back & write one for
>jerry too, and in it
>ill be sure to say
>that for the first time
>i was bout ready to
>deep down cry,
>
>and not just let a few
>tears fall.

Amen. For me, saying aloud "God, please help me to hold on forever" always keeps the human drama we all see in our own rhytes in perspective. Okayplayer 25Percenter knowz what I'm talkin' about *laugh* .

As much as I used to resent this in the past, humor done your own way is key for preventing what I can "the blues syndrome". I'm so glad God gave all of us the ability to make our own humor instead of having to follow someone else's humor. At other times, all os uf need to feel the blues for a day or two. I'm like that oftentimes as well.

You too are my reflection. Pray for all of us as you hold onto your gatekeeping God-given glory.

Peace, Love & Blessings.

James, aka Jsmoovjr or Marineke

"All that glitters ain't gold."

  

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8. "wow..."
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thats some kind of deep metaphorical off the wall i gotta look deeper type ish....this was good...sorta painful to read some stuff i cant phathom happening to me...this was good though.
peace
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jsmoovjr

Wed Jun-13-01 09:16 AM

  
12. "HIV & It's Lessons Happen to Anyone"
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>thats some kind of deep metaphorical
>off the wall i gotta
>look deeper type ish....this was
>good...sorta painful to read some
>stuff i cant phathom happening
>to me...this was good though.

Do not be afraid, as the Good Book says, to be empathetic with other human beings regardless of any differences. I pray by God's hand that all of us recognize this before it's way too late.

Peace, Love & Blessings.

James, aka Jsmoovjr or Marineke


"All that glitters ain't gold."

  

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14. "ARCHIVE"
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"God is..She's like a motherly
Che Guevara, benevolent,
like 6 feet tall with dreadlocks,
a big machine gun and a
beautiful laugh... maybe."

~ okp DJ Scratch n Sniff

i just want chu to know
how i feel
how i feel

  

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15. "I agree!!!"
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jsmoovjr

Thu Jun-14-01 09:28 AM

  
16. "Who does the archiving?"
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How is archiving done on this website? Curiosity bit me on this one *laugh*!

Peace, Love & Blessings.

James, aka Jsmoovjr or Marineke

"All that glitters ain't gold."

  

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17. "the moderator B"
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i sent him a message asking him to archive it...

slowly surely (c) jilly frum philly

i just want chu to know
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how i feel

  

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18. "i didn't want to read it"
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cuz i didn't want to feel what i'm feelin right now and i wish i hadn't read it b4 i wrote HATE...all i can say is dayum...i'm hurting






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jsmoovjr

Thu Jun-14-01 11:52 AM

  
20. "Don't Hold Onto The Pain ... Hold Onto The Memory."
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>cuz i didn't want to feel
>what i'm feelin right now
>and i wish i hadn't
>read it b4 i wrote
>HATE...all i can say is
>dayum...i'm hurting

We all go through; I definitely recognized and identified in your poem "Hate". As I surmise you alredy know, hate kills on so many levels. I pray you find your own way of making your own humor in the face of your pain so that you may survive and surpass it with God's glory.

Peace, Love & Blessings.

James, aka Jsmoovjr or Marineke

"All that glitters ain't gold."

  

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19. "beautiful"
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i had no idea what to expect

but that was beautiful


==**peace**==

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jsmoovjr

Fri Jun-15-01 08:51 AM

  
21. "Da Good Stuff"
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Love that we need almost always comes in inauspicious packages.

Peace, Love & Blessings.

James, aka Jsmoovjr or Marineke

>i had no idea what to
>expect
>
>but that was beautiful
>
>
>==**peace**==
>
>"The logic of divide and rule
>is still valid today."
> Capleton
>
>DomePoem Poets; Vibe Nation; One ppl
>under the spoken word


"All that glitters ain't gold."

  

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22. "gotdamn...."
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this is powerful on so many levels...

love in and of itself is a beautiful thing, but to transcend such a harrowing life experience through it and to respond to that transcendence in such a exquisite way...

my mind's blown

and I'm diggin this...

peace

L.


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jsmoovjr

Sun Jun-17-01 07:02 PM

  
23. "The Glory of God"
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His power used to blow my mind per se as well. However, God has shown all of us in some way that He will always take care of those who believe in His love while professing his name through sun and rain. I never claim to be some Bible-quoting scholar *laugh*. However, I am confident in what God has shown me through the gift He gave all of us: life.

I hold on with His strength. Lex, do not be amazed by His glory. Praise Him for it and you shall see that the reason this poem is what is it for you never was and never will be about li'l ol' me *chuckle*. Love is all there was, is and will ever be.

Peace, Love & Blessings.

James, aks Jsmoovjr or Marineke

>this is powerful on so many
>levels...
>
>love in and of itself is
>a beautiful thing, but to
>transcend such a harrowing life
>experience through it and to
>respond to that transcendence in
>such a exquisite way...
>
>my mind's blown
>
>and I'm diggin this...
>
>peace
>
>L.
>
>
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>Effect. Want Info? Email: carameldom@hotmail.com
>
>
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>if u ain't been here)
>
>
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>slaves on the ship/talkin 'bout/who
>got the flyest chains"
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"All that glitters ain't gold."

  

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24. "RE: Romanced Despite HIV"
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This was a really powerful piece...every line got stronger...really good stuff!
Peace and Blessings,
ONE!

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25. "this is straightup "funkdified flow-e-tree""
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this one hit up the mentals like halls mental-eucalyptus...

this has to be spat, hummed, spoken over a revolutionary funk/jazz/fusion of a traffic jam type sound...

this here was groovin man...

nice touch. payce.


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I am the words that hate can't replace
I

am

MUSE


...
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c'est moi, le timid_grape évasif ici encore pour écarter la joie et les rants de mal à la communauté de panneau.

regard à toutes les réponses que vous avez reçues jusqu'ici?!

bien, autant que nous voudrions à la sélection de nit par cette poésie entière et trouverions un certain tri de disyncronization de grammaire ou de fautes d'orthographe aléatoires, je ne puis pas (malheureusement).

ainsi...


>Body fly on some Lenny Kravitz
>track star tip
>Old school Brutha hair reflecting jazz

une description qui l'a est des bases avec une autre personne réelle ainsi une comparaison peut être faite. PAS une image que je personnellement imaginerais, mais tout le biases/prejudices de côté, le lecteur peut assumer une image si.

et...

la pièce se reflétante de jazz de cheveux... comment vous avez créé que le parallèle est très pittoresque intrinsèquement.

>Blessed up and down
>He reckons delegating hexes from Pentecostal
>bishops
>Midwest Jehovah's Witnesses and Baptist deacons


compris à quel point il unusal est comment cri de personnes (de certains) pour l'acceptation universelle pourtant pardonnez leur practices/teachings. discriminatoire que vous ne pouvez pas l'avoir voulu dire de cette façon mais c'est traduction de my/our.

>Strongly we stare and love and
>hurt and live and breathe
>each token and scar and
>smile and sigh in color

la bonne description de la façon dont la vie se déplace rapidement sans pause lisant cette ligne donne à plusieurs reprises ce sentiment exact que je suis sûr que les gens peuvent identifier avec.h.

>No bother or hurry

à mon avis, cette ligne trouve comme somber/sad / non plein de regrets... mais recevant la vie pendant qu'elle est. je trie d'entendu quelqu'un qui dit ceci avec un::shrug:: comme si disant, est-ce que " je sais mais que je puis faire à son sujet? Pourquoi souci?.. "

poésie puissante de serious/saddening/yet de votre imagination/of vos life :):(:)

//// timide de raisin ////

anti-huit--cinq au consortium: timid_grape; -) {18 juin}


  

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jsmoovjr

Mon Jun-18-01 07:04 AM

  
27. "English please, not French."
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Although my background in French is enhanced by my years of Latin, please repost your comments about this poem in English (or Spanish, German, Japanese or even Latin *chuckle*). Nothing against French; I just think it'd be more ideal for the majority of viewers to see your response in the language used by the majority of Okayplayers for posting.

Peace, Love & Blessings.

James, aka Jsmoovjr or Marineke

>c'est moi, le timid_grape évasif ici
>encore pour écarter la joie
>et les rants de mal
>à la communauté de panneau.
>
>
>regard à toutes les réponses que
>vous avez reçues jusqu'ici?!
>
>bien, autant que nous voudrions à
>la sélection de nit par
>cette poésie entière et trouverions
>un certain tri de disyncronization
>de grammaire ou de fautes
>d'orthographe aléatoires, je ne puis
>pas (malheureusement).
>
>ainsi...
>
>
>>Body fly on some Lenny Kravitz
>>track star tip
>>Old school Brutha hair reflecting jazz
>
>une description qui l'a est des
>bases avec une autre personne
>réelle ainsi une comparaison peut
>être faite. PAS une image
>que je personnellement imaginerais, mais
>tout le biases/prejudices de côté,
>le lecteur peut assumer une
>image si.
>
>et...
>
>la pièce se reflétante de jazz
>de cheveux... comment vous avez
>créé que le parallèle est
>très pittoresque intrinsèquement.
>
>>Blessed up and down
>>He reckons delegating hexes from Pentecostal
>>bishops
>>Midwest Jehovah's Witnesses and Baptist deacons
>
>
>compris à quel point il unusal
>est comment cri de personnes
>(de certains) pour l'acceptation universelle
>pourtant pardonnez leur practices/teachings. discriminatoire
>que vous ne pouvez pas
>l'avoir voulu dire de cette
>façon mais c'est traduction de
>my/our.
>
>>Strongly we stare and love and
>>hurt and live and breathe
>>each token and scar and
>>smile and sigh in color
>
>la bonne description de la façon
>dont la vie se déplace
>rapidement sans pause lisant cette
>ligne donne à plusieurs reprises
>ce sentiment exact que je
>suis sûr que les gens
>peuvent identifier avec.h.
>
>>No bother or hurry
>
>à mon avis, cette ligne trouve
>comme somber/sad / non plein
>de regrets... mais recevant la
>vie pendant qu'elle est. je
>trie d'entendu quelqu'un qui dit
>ceci avec un::shrug:: comme si
>disant, est-ce que " je
>sais mais que je puis
>faire à son sujet? Pourquoi
>souci?.. "
>
>poésie puissante de serious/saddening/yet de votre
>imagination/of vos life :):(:)
>
>//// timide de raisin ////
>
>anti-huit--cinq au consortium: timid_grape; -) {18
>juin}


"All that glitters ain't gold."

  

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JLC

Mon Jun-18-01 07:36 AM

  
28. "i likeD thiS..."
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it's a lot of poeTs on thiS boarD moreso than EmCee's..

thiS waS fresH....

i enjoyeD it...

respeCt

  

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