first of all...I have to big up this because I'm gald to see you thinking on this level .....as for content these are issues that I'm gald have been brought to your attention by whom ever did that ...however i think you try to touch too many in one piece ......as for struchure the prelude ....was a banging concept ..i've done these things here before ...way to use you thinking caps and come different ...and i know some times that seems so hard....the poem itself was a beast also although I feel like you felt the need to ryhme at times ...and you held back on something you wanted to let go ...so you should feel incomplete with this ...word play great ...mang everytime i read you remind me of howi used to be when i first came and nobody read me ...no body cared but i stayed ........but now there's me here to up this and read this and i will ....... big up's .....this is one of your better pieces ....one man amazed at this work ....on the same token who am I to say anything about this...this is your expression and no one can say there's anything wrong with it.

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