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85595, #6 of 30. climax. Posted by Morehouse, Thu Apr-08-10 10:11 AM
your voice was the song i was thinking of while we made love.
the neighbors told us to turn the music down but we were at the part
when the chorus doubles back into itself again and again,
just to make sure we felt it the first time. the sound our lips
make while touching, sweat dripping off my brow
finding rhythm, the moon's light at your collarbone,
as our bodies danced inside a beating drum
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85596, RE: #6 of 30. climax. Posted by gsquared, Thu Apr-08-10 04:47 PM
soft clarity, very nice...
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85599, wrd up... Posted by serpentinefire, Thu Apr-08-10 11:24 PM
love the metaphor... and i particularly dig the rhythm that you maintained throughout the piece ************************************** http://selewa.etsy.com << the jewelry
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85605, our own personal Trey Songz... Posted by mindful, Fri Apr-09-10 06:07 AM
this was pleasant, passionate, and well worth the read...
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85617, RE: #6 of 30. climax. Posted by HueyNewton, Sat Apr-10-10 02:35 PM
like the way metaphors dictate the pace of this, nice one . . {}
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