i'm a drum guy first n foremost. i play drums n percussion but i started beatmaking around about the same time (2000/2001). which doesnt mean im picky, just means ill always have sumthn to say about the drums. in this case, the drum sounds and structure themselves are all dope, i woulda just tinkered with the mix some more, maybe beefed it up (lazy guy talk for more bass via the EQ), and with like a teaspoon of reverb. just a general phattening up.
otherwise, i didnt get bored for the entire duration (typically the entries are shorter than 3mins so if u can make somethin longer than that and not lose attention and cause steady head-noddage, then its an achievement).
digs it.

V.