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12049, *applauds*
Posted by mara, Mon May-31-04 04:55 PM
>love is what it is, what it wants to be

The repetition of this line made me think of Giovanni's voice reading those words. It just sounds like something she would write to me.

>wouldn't love have come home last night
>instead of laying in another love, in search of it's own
>love because it's hard to decide which love is right,
>but wouldn't and could love be home,

This also makes me think of Giovanni. This was a good poem. At some point (I can't remember where now) I think it would have been better (@ least for me) if you had eliminated everything from then on and kept the very last stanza. That was a nice ending. I think this was a nice poem.